Ancient Lace



I watched her Fragile Spirit tear, like ancient, sun-scorched lace
I remember tracing the battle-scars, across her weathered face
They reminded me of riverbeds, dried up remnants from the past
Meandering through dark corridors, of things that didn't last

Hidden in these caverns, were her youthful broken dreams
The pain of her lost beauty, still echoes from her screams
She crept toward the mirror soaked in Vodka enhanced hate
Her primal fears still haunt my dreams, but it's fifty years too late.

Too late to save my mother; too late to save myself
Feeling the pain of broken dreams, I took the Vodka off the shelf.
Now, as I creep toward my mirror, I see my mother's face'
I hear her screams reminding me, I'm just a remnant of ancient lace.

Another fragile spirit torn like, sun-scorched, ancient lace.

About this poem

It's ironic how sometimes, everything we despised in a parent becomes such a focal point in our own life that we might inherently take on some of those 'despised' traits ourselves. Alcoholism is one of those common traits for many.

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Written on March 13, 2023

Submitted by lovingempath on March 13, 2023

Modified on May 03, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AABB CCDD EEAA A
Closest metre Iambic heptameter
Characters 810
Words 145
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 1

Robin Loving

Sometimes the words flow like a murder of crows. They've held my secrets for the past 65-years. And sometimes they repeat them back to me, and laugh. more…

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29 Comments
  • luisestable1
    It is not clear if the situation here if for going from youth and beauty to ugliness and old age or if the cause of all this is something else or both, but the picture the poem paints is pitiful and sad.
    A poem that has its moments of a situation gone bad and that could be the main reason for the selection. 
    LikeReply3 months ago
  • npirandy
    That's really sweet coming from such a talented lady.
    LikeReply 14 months ago
    • lovingempath
      Thanks Randy. You caught me in a good mood :)
      LikeReply4 months ago
  • npirandy
    No one spins a better tale of tragedy than Robin.
    LikeReply 24 months ago
    • Symmetry60
      Amen. Only one #1 for this man and you be lookin at her.
      LikeReply 14 months ago
    • lovingempath
      I forgot to leave a comment along with my vote Randy. You touch more emotions than I ever could. Your poetry always touches my soul. Good luck!
      LikeReply4 months ago
    • lovingempath
      I am at your mercy Buddy!
      LikeReply4 months ago
  • CarmiPhilander
    Wow. Your diction is powerful and evocative. It's difficult to summarize an entire story in just a few stanzas but you nailed it.
    LikeReply 14 months ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you so much for your generous comment Carmi!
      LikeReply4 months ago
  • Philipo
    I missed this one too. Fine work. Adverse Emotions do the work from what I can see.
    LikeReply 24 months ago
  • donka_k
    A haunting image that takes hold of you... this is simply pure, rich and heart-felt poetry.
    LikeReply 14 months ago
  • Giselavigil
    Simply beautiful. Much truth in your words. Less the vodka, it reminded me so much of the relationship with my own mother.
    LikeReply 24 months ago
  • acronimous
    Love the captivating image you’ve created for your award-wining poem, Robin! Looks great!
    LikeReply 210 months ago
    • lovingempath
      This new app is amazing! I used it on a few of my poems, and the choices it provided were so 'right on' I had a hard time choosing only one :). Thanks!!
      LikeReply10 months ago
    • acronimous
      So glad to hear that!
      LikeReply 110 months ago
  • TortillasAreNotBiceps
    Damn this is some good-ass writing. Guess who's stalking who now, toots?
    LikeReply 311 months ago
    • LinYoest
      Stalk away.
      LikeReply 111 months ago
    • LinYoest
      Opps. I thought you posted this on a poem of mine. I don’t really have authority to grant you stalking privileges of anyone other than myself.
      LikeReply 111 months ago
    • TortillasAreNotBiceps
      Oh no, now you've done it. I'm stalking Robin stamped with your blessing. LMAO! :-P
      LikeReply 111 months ago
    • LinYoest
      LikeReply11 months ago
    • lovingempath
      You have my permission :).
      LikeReply 111 months ago
    • LinYoest
      I love you!
      LikeReply 111 months ago
    • lovingempath
      I love you too Linda :)!
      LikeReply11 months ago
  • karlcfolkes
    Amen, my dear friend. Graced with the divine spirit within us, we are asked to be each other’s keepers.
    LikeReply 112 months ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you for your reminder of that Karl. Bless you.
      LikeReply12 months ago
  • karlcfolkes
    Dear Robin,
    This “Ancient Lace” has left its trace,
    for a loving daughter to embrace.
    Yet it contains a precious cure,
    to remove all that you find impure.
    That Ancient lace comes with a love,
    now stored up in the heavens above.
    Its spirit greater than a vodka taste,
    taken so often, and in desperate haste.
    That Ancient Lace now bids you friend,
    in every way your life amend.
    The course you take through poetry,
    is the first step to become free.
    Its spirits are that cure you need.
    Upon it then you must now feed;
    to give you all the strength you need.
    Be well, be safe, God bless you friend.
    Take this moment now, your life to mend.
     
    LikeReply 212 months ago
    • lovingempath
      Dear Karl,
      I am absolutely blown away by this beautiful piece of poetry....and I am honored that you would take the time to write it in reference to my own poem. Thank you. And as far as the spirit called 'vodka'; it no longer has a hold on me. It wasn't my friend :). I believe in Jesus (always have), but I forgot about him for a few time-periods in my life. Thank you again, my friend for this beautiful tribute to poetry and the wealth of the spirit. 
      LikeReply 112 months ago
  • cokerrogers
    I relate to this. I feel for the bad times you had but hope that a bit of understanding may have came through your own understanding of vices. I wish you the best of luck in your future. Wonderful poem
    LikeReply 112 months ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you Coker...My mother was a lot of things; but first and foremost; she was a teacher of 'life'.
      LikeReply12 months ago
  • JoeStrickland
    This is fantastic. I'm definitely following you
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      I've only read one of your poems so far Joe, but loved it! I'll get back to the others soon...and I'll be following you. Thank you for your vote of confidence on this piece.
      LikeReply 11 year ago
  • Jewoo525
    I came to show some love back, but I think it’s very obvious how excellent this poem is. “I am Again” was also in my pinned list during the most recent competition. You are, without a doubt, a very advanced poet who is miles ahead of me, I learn a lot from just reading your work and competing alongside you. You clearly love this platform very much, your passion for both poetry and this site is infectious. I wouldn’t engage as much in the comments if I didn’t have such exemplars to take after. Please keep writing! Looking forward to seeing your entry next month. 
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Wow! After reading your stash of hidden treasures; I am blown away by your compliment. I will be following your work more closely, because I believe you are one of the premier poetic, story-tellers on this site. Thank you so much! 
      LikeReply 11 year ago
  • Teril
    The metaphor of "ancient lace" stays with me. It is an image that has a vivid past, a sad present, and an inevitable future, all competing for attention even as I finish reading your poem and go into my day. It has made its impression, a true poet's work. 
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Speaking as one 'true poet' to another...thank you Teri for your kind words. And now I think I'll try to wash the 'ancient lace' curtains I have hanging on my front window; without tearing them :). 
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • jerrylogie
    This is a beautiful yet sad memorial. I could feel the love you held for your mother as well as the sadness she brought you through her vodka, But I don't think it's ever to late for you...Great poem , take your strength from your talent!! 
    LikeReply 21 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you Jerry...and I'm happy to say that my 'Vodka' phase is over :).
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • ZMosa
    Simply amazing i love the double emotion that mirror each other through the lines.
    Well done dear poet
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you Zara...I read your 'Falling Emperor' poem and I believe you have a true gift with metaphors. Stay with it!
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • jessicam.81529
    Wow. This hit me hard. It's amazing and extremely powerful. I had a similar mother growing up and the way you wrote your feelings just echoes inside me. Bravo and congratulations! I look forward to reading more of your writing. Thank you for sharing it. 
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you Jessica...I love meeting a new soul-sister through poetry!
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • AIDA
    Wow, what a powerful and impactful poem. You have a way with words and emotions that is truly remarkable. Your ability to capture the pain and struggles of those who have been through so much is truly inspiring.

    Your use of imagery and metaphor is breathtaking. The comparison of the battle scars to dried-up riverbeds is just one example of your masterful writing. And the way you paint a picture of the mother's pain and torment is heart-wrenching.

    While this poem is already excellent, there is always room for improvement. One area that could benefit from some work is the pacing. Perhaps there could be some more variation in the rhythm and speed of the lines to add some extra emotional impact.

    Overall, I am blown away by your talent and creativity. Thank you for sharing this beautiful work of art with us.
     
    LikeReply 21 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you AIDA...I always love your positive energy :).
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • Smariec184
    Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece.
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you for reading and commenting :).
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • robertrad2021
    Excellent poem.
    LikeReply 11 year ago
  • baways
    Well wrote and thought provoking, congrats!
    LikeReply 11 year ago
  • LinYoest
    Robin, you are an amazing wordsmith! Such a thought-provoking and emotion-laden piece of writing. Great poem.
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Coming from such a 'wordsmith' as yourself Linda...I consider this a very high compliment. Sorry it took me so long to thank-you, but I've been in Limbo for a few days :).
      LikeReply 11 year ago
    • LinYoest
      Hey, no worries! Thank you for the compliment. I haven't written anything recently, and finances were too low to enter contests but hopefully, that's resolved now.
      LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      If you ever have a problem entering a contest due to finances Linda...You're looking at your fairy godmother :). I'll figure out a way to keep your talent alive! xoxox
      LikeReply 21 year ago
    • LinYoest
      Robin, you are absolutely the kindest person! Thank you for that sweet offer. I was able to enter a poem today.
      LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      YAY! I have a few things brewing in my head, but nothing has solidified yet. It's looking like I might need to add a little cornstarch to my brew soon! :)
      LikeReply 11 year ago
    • LinYoest
      Oh, I know how that is. I have so many half-baked poems myself. Perhaps a little cornstarch will help in the future. Thanks for the tip! ;)
      LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      LOL...Don't try snorting it :)
      LikeReply 11 year ago
    • LinYoest
      Oh no, I won't. Though I know those who might. lol
      33 years sober here: drug and alcohol free.
      Life under the influence, is not life to me!
      LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Good girl :)
      LikeReply 31 year ago
  • Symmetry58
    For me this is your best work. Unbelievable poetry here, Robin. Wow!!! I never stood a chance and for that I am glad.
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      oh my Buddy...you ALWAYS stand a chance. I think I got lucky this month. Thank you so much for your words. They mean the world to me.
      LikeReply 11 year ago
    • Symmetry58
      You are a champion and I am proud of my friend.
      LikeReply 11 year ago
  • FLi
    Wow, a big hooray Robin!!! Keep up the good work. So happy for you. :)
    LikeReply 21 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you so much Francelle...you are a great friend :).
      LikeReply 11 year ago
  • Donnafenech5
    Ancient lace gave me goosebumps as I read it
    Such a beautiful piece of writing.
    LikeReply 21 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you so much Donna. Your poem gave me goosebumps as well. I think I know this little girl in your poem.
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • donnam.76665
    I am a believer that a poem should move us. The author's fragile pain screams out to me from this piece of poetry. I cried.
    LikeReply 21 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you so much Donna. If I made you cry, well...my job here is done :) (Like we all need something else to cry about :).
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • Running_late2003
    I read every poem more than once but this one stuck with me. The poetic flow makes it easy to follow, the heartfelt words tell a deep story, my compassion runs deep as I read it. Great job in this expressive poem... you have touched my heart. 
    LikeReply 21 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you so much Teresa...I think we have a lot in common!
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • Ashvs4285
    This is beautifully written and the way the words flow together makes is magical.
    LikeReply 11 year ago

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