I am not afraid of the dark

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  alanswansea18

  I love the way your mind thinks. Were do you get that from?

  LikeReply3 months ago
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    Kaytee

    happy to hear my ADHD mind intrigues others:) sometimes lines come to me on dreams too.

    LikeReply3 months ago
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  AIDA

  The poem is quite evocative and the presentation of the darkness as both a refuge and a source of fear is truly engaging. Your verse explores complex emotions in an interesting and delicate way. The eloquence of your phrasing particularly in lines such as "Shadows curve into villainous crones" and "They disguise themselves by day" really paints a vivid picture.
  
  For improvement, it could be beneficial to make the nature(or characteristics) of the "demons" you spoke about more explicit, giving the reader a deeper understanding of the fears being faced. The ending of the poem is rather stark, which may have been your intention, but it could end on a more hopeful or defiant note to maintain an underlying sense of optimism. Since poems are such personal expressions, this is simply a suggestion, as your current ending lends a hauntingly beautiful darkness to the piece. Keep up the good work and your creativity flowing! more »

  LikeReply4 months ago
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  charlesedwardyork

  Nice poem. I can feel some of the emotions and relate to them.

  LikeReply 14 months ago
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  Symmetry60

  You may have read the poem I wrote in the past, but just see if you can see how we wrote about the same topic pretty much. It's titled Dark Corner Monster Dragons. You'll have to scroll my old junk a bit. :-) more »

  LikeReply4 months ago
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  Symmetry60

  Absolutely worth the wait, my awesome friend.
  
  Imagine an irony and that darkness could be a cure for shadows that haunt. What's even more ironic is that I wrote a poem that is so similar in nature to this that it actually boggles my mind. Not that the wording in the same, but the theme and underlying premise is about spot-on. I'm going to post it today so you can read it. Let me know what you think. It will be an "as-per-usual" tough decipher what with me overcomplicating everything but see if you can pick up the nuances in it.
  
  I absolutely love the concept of darkness hiding monsters from you and you them.
  
  Question: Do you still fear the shadows? I'd surmise its only referring to nighttime shadows and not sunlight shadows. more »

  LikeReply4 months ago
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    Kaytee

    I'm glad it was worth the wait but this is not the complicated one with the overdone metaphors I was working on. I forgot I started this one and found it when I was procrastinating working on the other one :) I'm honored that you compared it to your poem. Yes, the theme is very similar but man your use of words in your poem is phenomenal. You always blow me away.
    I don't know that I necessarily fear the shadows any more. I think we all have shadows or a shadow side and the more we fear it the worse it becomes.
    I do struggle with being in the spotlight and truly being "seen" so maybe I am still more comfortable in the dark but I am getting comfortable with the shadows. more »

    LikeReply 14 months ago
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  talygarza

  In my opinion this is an interesting composition exploring relation between childish fears and darkness as poetic theme, the conclusion overcoming the fear can be read as an optimistic and atemporal message.

  LikeReply4 months ago
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    Kaytee

    thanks so much for your feedback. It did start off in the past and then fast forwarded to the present. Thanks for reading and posting!

    LikeReply 14 months ago
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    talygarza

    you’re welcome I like to read others’s poems and comment when I can.

    LikeReply 14 months ago