Candy Land

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  alanswansea18

  I love it.

  LikeReply9 days ago
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  adam.gutteridge

  This poem very much aligns with my personal views. I’ve seen many fully grown adults in my time, scrabbling around for more than their share of “candy”; whether it’s material things or the chance to be close to someone who could further their cause (rather than someone else’s!).
  I love the “candy” metaphor, and the pandemonium of the children fighting for it is really very visual.
  Children or adults - “For candy they will punch and pound” (you bet they will!).
  A great piece of writing John with a strong and defiant finish!
  I admire the way you always manage to write in such poetic language! Well done and congratulations on the win! more »

  LikeReply2 months ago
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  JokerGem

  Definitely a message I get behind.
  Great vehicle to drive home the message too.
  I should be taking notes on your approach...

  LikeReply2 months ago
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  Symmetry60

  Huff!!! Okay, this is getting redundant, buddy. I now understand that you could write about gum stuck on a shoe and make it sound poetic. I had no idea this one was yours until now. Great work and, as always, to be admired. more »

  LikeReply 12 months ago
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    Vixility

    Thanks Steve! I was really surprised that your poem didn’t hit top three—coupled with your Shakespeare-styled poem, it is one of my favorites.

    LikeReply2 months ago
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    Symmetry60

    I swear, John, I am as humble as they come, but I honestly thought this should have placed top 3. I know that sounds arrogant and/or pretentious, but I call them as I see them. Again, it boils down to people's preference at a given juncture of their circumstance. It lands or it doesn't. Therein lay the rub. I already have this month's winner entered, so be on alert, buddy. ;-) more »

    LikeReply2 months ago
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  ABP57

  This poem has a brilliant use of rhyme and meter. The use of a singular rhyme throughout the entire piece ( the 'ound sound) in words like 'found' and 'ground', holds together, using a light and lyrical framework, a powerful message and warning about greed. It also uses the playful innocence of youth as a warning as to greed's petty nature and deleterious effects over time. I appreciated the poem's use of narrative elements(always difficult in poetry, I feel) combined with a profound warning, framed within it's whimsical backdrop. To me, that shows mastery. A few things stood out for me. First,was the use of two (again) rhyming words to depict the soul; 'unsound', then 'drowned'. Keep up the wonderful craftsmanship in your work. more »

  LikeReply 12 months ago
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    Vixility

    Wow! Thank you for the amazing review! I tried my best to polish every point you touched on—thank you for noticing. I wondered to myself if a poem could be sustained and be taken serious with just a single rhyming element. I was worried it would sound too musical, too limerick … apparently not.
    
    Again, thank you for the review and the vote. more »

    LikeReply2 months ago
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  tiggerchristy

  I can really see the imagery in this poem and understand the teaching moment of the author

  LikeReply 12 months ago
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  DeBoer

  Masterfully written. Liked the metaphor.

  LikeReply 12 months ago