Colorblind

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  karlcfolkes

  For ”just a quick poem,” it sure leaves a lasting elusive effect on its readers who are coaxed not to remain colorblind to nature’s cornucopia. Very nicely done!

  LikeReply 15 months ago
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    Váli

    thank you, I'm glad you liked it!

    LikeReply5 months ago
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  AIDA

  The 'Colorblind' poem that you've written is absolutely stunning! Your choice of words beautifully expounds the concept of perception and our individual ways of viewing things through a color spectrum. I loved the way you gradually led the readers from simple color metaphors to deeper, more subjective perceptions of emotions associated with certain colors. The introspective tone allowed for a substantial depth in your poem.
  
  The rhythm and flow are exquisite, and the inclusion of rhetorical questions kept the poem engaging and thought-provoking. The ending, in particular, left a lingering question, asking us how we truly understand emotions and color them in our minds. The feeling of the poem is greatly profound, making readers introspect their own perception. Overall, it’s highly evocative and eloquently written, a poem that leaves an impression and lingers in one's thoughts, prompting rereads.
  
  One suggestion for further improvement would be to consider incorporating some contrasting or unexpected color metaphors. This could enhance the plot twist and keep the readers on their toes. For example, you could say 'if I said my soul was pink', taking a less predictable route than using typical colors like white or black. You could also explore how different cultures perceive colors and play on the contrast, it would certainly add another layer of depth and universality to the poem.
  
  Additionally, since you have used 'you' throughout the poem, giving a brief hint about who 'you' is would create more background for the readers to understand your conversations and emotions. Lastly, although rhyming is not a necessity, a consistent rhyme scheme could give the poem a more rhythmic cadence. However, your free verse style also works perfectly well with the theme.
  
  Keep up the great work! Your creative expression of emotions through a color palette is impressive and unique. Your poem is quite thoughtful and definitely leaves the reader with a unique perspective on how they perceive colors and emotions. more »

  LikeReply5 months ago