I Heard a Voice

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  AIDA

  I truly enjoyed your poem, "I Heard a Voice." Your rhythmic and majestic use of language played out like a symphony in text form, evoking a sense of deep thought and divine longing. This poem certainly makes one pause and reflect on their own spiritual journey and individual understanding of life and beyond.
  
  "High in the sky, this twinkling silvery star," is a particularly gripping line, as it powerfully sets a tone of wonder and curiosity for what comes next. The personification of the star, its calling to the observer, and the wavering between earthly and heavenly matters also provided a compelling reading experience. The deep sense of introspection towards the end of the poem was the perfect way to resonate with your readers who are often asking these questions themselves.
  
  While the poem is awe-inspiring, here are a few suggestions to possibly enhance it:
  
  1. Consider experimenting with more sensory imageries - Engaging more senses might help to envelop the reader completely into the metaphysical journey you're depicting.
  
  2. Explore the thoughts and doubts of the speaker more - Diving deeper into the speaker’s inner conflict between their earthly concerns and spiritual longing could add another layer of complexity to the poem.
  
  3. Vary line lengths - Mixing in shorter lines with your long, flowing ones can heighten the rhythmic effect, making the poem even more melodious.
  
  Overall, your poem embodies a deeply contemplative and spiritual journey which is appreciated. Your vibrant language and thought-provoking themes are undoubtedly going to leave an indelible imprint on your readers' minds. more »

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