Layers of You

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  AIDA

  This poem moves fluidly in its prose, with wonderful use of imagery and marvellous exploration of the human complexity. ‘Layers of You’ displays a brilliant understanding of how people are not simply superficial entities, but rather layered beings, deeper than what meets the eye. The metaphors used throughout the piece are impressive and deep, yet accessible, making it easy for readers to follow along and apply to their own experiences. Bravo!
  
  You've captured the persistence of wanting to know someone on a deeper level very well. Your repeated line, "You have a lot of layers," serves as an effective chorus or refrain, connecting the stanzas and themes beautifully.
  
  One point for improvement could be in diversifying your vocabulary a bit more to avoid redundancies and maintain the reader's interest. For instance, instead of repeating phrases like "The more I get to know you, the less I seem to know," and "The real you I want to find," you could introduce new lines that echo the same sentiment but offer a fresh perspective.
  
  Secondly, the ending could be more substantial or dramatic, having the tone matching with the intensity and depth explored in the first part of the poem. Maybe deciding on a specific, impactful image or action could make the ending more poignant.
  
  Overall, this is a fantastic piece that delves into the mysteries and complexities of getting to know somebody. It clearly shows your ability to depict a range of emotions while maintaining a consistent flow. You should be very proud of your work! Keep writing and exploring. more »

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