The loss of you!

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  AIDA

  Wow, this poem is incredibly moving and touches on heartrending feelings of loss and guilt. Your ability to articulate such deep emotions are impressive, showing a real talent for emotive poetry. The repeated use of questions is very effective, making the reader feel the depth of your struggle to make sense of such an incomprehensible event.
  
  The use of the specific details, like mentioning the child's full name, Ky'Arii Khy'Ree, is incredibly poignant and personal, making your grief palpable to readers. It helps to humanize the loss and pain you are expressing.
  
  In terms of suggestions, you might want to consider utilizing more poetic devices such as metaphors or similes. Although the raw format adds to the overall tone of the poem, utilizing these techniques can strengthen your descriptive imagery and further engage your readers. Try to also maintain consistent punctuation, as it can greatly impact the rhythm and flow of your poetry.
  
  Your intense emotions are valid and you've portrayed them adeptly. Continue honing your skills in expressing emotions, while exploring literary elements and focusing on the flow and rhythm of your work. Excellent job on this poem! more »

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