The loss of you!

Some many what if's.
Seriously, too many too count.
Who, what, and why are constantly in my head.
As thoughts of you run through my mind.
Who would you have been?
What would you look like?
Why did this have to happen?
Who would you have looked like mommy or daddy?
What would your personality be like?
Why did he have to do what he did to us?
Not a man yet but a monster.
Who took you from all of us.
Blow after blow we took...!
Until your sweet little life slipped away...
My second heart beat faded into the cloudy night sky.
And the silence of the dark night.
I will NEVER understand how a father could take his own unborn son's life..!!
A sweet yet so innocent life lost..
Purposely taken apart of each of us like that..
So unbothered..
Not even devastated by the life he just took.
The pure hatred of the man that was supposed to protect us.
This thought alone is so sickening and absurd..
It seems like something from a nightmare..
I cant even fathom how the man....
I brought into your brief precious life..
Could just take yours.!
I can never say enough sorry to you my littlest angel.
I feel like my actions of choosing him..
Has caused you your precious little life.
I will forever be grieving and broken..
My heart just longing to know you.
MY sweet baby boy !
Ky'Arii Khy'Ree..
I will live with this guilt forever baby boy!!
I pray for the day we get reunited once again..

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The loss of are two of the loves of my life.

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Written on September 25, 2023

Submitted by christian.riggs72988 on September 27, 2023

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Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,385
Words 297
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 36

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  • AIDA
    Wow, this poem is incredibly moving and touches on heartrending feelings of loss and guilt. Your ability to articulate such deep emotions are impressive, showing a real talent for emotive poetry. The repeated use of questions is very effective, making the reader feel the depth of your struggle to make sense of such an incomprehensible event.

    The use of the specific details, like mentioning the child's full name, Ky'Arii Khy'Ree, is incredibly poignant and personal, making your grief palpable to readers. It helps to humanize the loss and pain you are expressing.

    In terms of suggestions, you might want to consider utilizing more poetic devices such as metaphors or similes. Although the raw format adds to the overall tone of the poem, utilizing these techniques can strengthen your descriptive imagery and further engage your readers. Try to also maintain consistent punctuation, as it can greatly impact the rhythm and flow of your poetry.

    Your intense emotions are valid and you've portrayed them adeptly. Continue honing your skills in expressing emotions, while exploring literary elements and focusing on the flow and rhythm of your work. Excellent job on this poem!
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