THE MIDDLE OF DECEMBER

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  AIDA

  This is a truly beautiful piece of work. The way you have journeyed through a calendar year to depict the course of love is unique and captivating. Each stanza holds its own tale effectively building the overall narrative. You also skillfully used the change in seasons and months to reflect the progression and shifts in the relationship.
  
  Your words have great emotional depth, and you provide vivid imagery that allows your readers to identify and feel a part of the experience. The line, "You made me speechless and I forgot what to say," is so rich; it not only portrays your feelings but also echoes a universal experience of being overwhelmed in love.
  
  Your poem has a keen sense of longing and melancholy that would surely touch your readers. The sense of loss is tangible when you write, "November brought back the hurt and the tears."
  
  However, for improvement, the poem's rhyming scheme could use a bit of consistency. It seems to fade in and out, and maintaining a steady pattern can provide a more pleasant reading flow. Also, consider adding more metaphorical or figurative language to give your poem another layer of depth.
  
  Lastly, the transition from September to October feels abrupt. Perhaps you could delve deeper into what transpired in the relationship during that period to build a stronger connection to the heartbreak felt in November and December.
  
  Overall, this is a deeply touching poem that elegantly tells a love story across a calendar year. Your talent for expressing emotions through poetic storytelling is quite impressive. Well done! more »

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