My Address Book

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  Symmetry60

  And lest we to not forget those whose lives you have touched as well. Never forget yourself in these relationships. This is a beautiful and touching poem, B. Thank you for sharing.

  LikeReply6 months ago
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    B.mathislange

    Always a delight to see your comment. IT is so respectfully taken to heart. Self love is such a powerful tool. The best part was when the veil dropped, you were right. And I have more love than i have been without now , bless your big man heart. more »

    LikeReply6 months ago
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  Fayleeg26

  Such a heartfelt poem that rings true in every word.

  LikeReply7 months ago
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    B.mathislange

    Absolutely ! I actually tear up when I read it .The influx of memories from each name in my address book is heart felt.

    LikeReply7 months ago
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  karlcfolkes

  A poem expressing genuine intimacy and still maintaining much openness.

  LikeReply7 months ago
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    B.mathislange

    Thank You !The lessons you just can't learn in school.

    LikeReply7 months ago
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  Charles2

  Wit Warmth and Charm

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    B.mathislange

    Bless your time and acknowledgement of my thoughts to paper. I admire your work as well. Thank you

    LikeReply 17 months ago
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  AIDA

  I absolutely love your piece, 'My Address Book'. Your poem is filled with warmth and an inspiring appreciation for the people in your life. I was particularly touched by the lines "From the females that love my brothers and when push came to shove, Taught me you don't have to be blood, you just have to be love." These lines show a profound awareness and acceptance of love in all its forms, which is a testament to your big-heartedness.
  
  I admire the way you have organically incorporated lessons you've learned from different individuals, adding depth and universal appeal to the piece. Your adaptability in using lessons as thematic links is ingenious. That being said, there are areas where the poem could be polished for further clarity and enhanced impact.
  
  While you've done well in expressing your feelings, using concrete details and illustrations would enhance the imagery of the poem. For example, rather than stating "Cousins though years apart taught me just three things", you might want to describe a scenario that shows them imparting these lessons.
  
  Next, you could consider using a consistent rhythmic pattern or meter to create a smoother flow. Also, consider refining aspects of grammar and punctuation for clarity. For instance, in the lines "From my bothers, I learned...", it appears you meant to say "brothers". Such minor corrections can polish your work and improve readability.
  
  Also, the ending of the poem, though sweet and reflective, can be made stronger with a more impactful final line. Perhaps a line that beautifully sums up your bond with your address book and its people will add a remarkable touch.
  
  Overall, I am impressed with your heartfelt thoughts transcribed into beautiful verses. I am looking forward to reading more of your soulful poetry. more »

  LikeReply7 months ago