'Bad Dog and Pollywog'

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  AIDA

  Wow, what a fun and playful poem! Your use of humor and playful language adds so much personality to the piece. The way you describe the different dogs and their personalities is both charming and relatable.
  
  One suggestion I have is to maybe expand on the theme of the revolving door. It's a great idea, but it's only mentioned briefly at the beginning, and then not really referred to again. It could be interesting to explore that concept more throughout the piece. Additionally, some of the lines could benefit from a bit of restructuring to improve the flow of the poem.
  
  Overall, your writing style is engaging and entertaining, and I enjoyed reading this piece. Keep up the great work! more »

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  Symmetry58

  Holy hell! This is freaking brilliant. Now see, this is the type of poetry I cannot write. Your story-telling skills are prime. You should literally turn this entire poem into a kid's book. All I kept thinking was "Dr. Seuss." more »

  LikeReply 11 year ago
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    lovingempath

    I'm thinking of doing that :). I have clear pictures of my talking doggie, stuck in my head. And I would hope it does better as a kid's book than it did as a poem. Thanks Steve. As always your feedback is priceless to me. more »

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    Symmetry58

    I'm telling you, you are perfect for it. That is all I could think the entire time - man this is a great children's book. I LOVE the line "
    My new name is 'Good Boy'', no
    longer'Bad dog." If you add pictures to this poem, it is a perfect book and story. I knew a gal years ago, Elizabeth Borros, who did a children's book and got it published. It came out awesome. more »

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    Symmetry58

    Holy hell! I actually looked for and FOUND her book. Well, more like found what used to be her book. It is still showing on Amazon, but is apparently pretty much out of circulation. You really need to do it, darling.
    
    It's entitled Let's Meet Rocco. https://www.amazon.com/Lets-Meet-Rocco-Elizabeth-Borros/dp/1606048147#customerReviews

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  npirandy

  There was a clear story that made sense and was easy to follow. It had direction and meaning with decent meter and good rhyme. It was humorous, but meaningful.

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  amandajanebearer

  I read all 150 poems. This by far stuck out the most. It was exquisitely written. The realness, humor, story, view point, emotion and rhyming were perfect. I would love to read more by this writer. I would love to see this poem place because it is truly a winner! more »

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    lovingempath

    Thank you for your vote and generous support for my poem Amanda. People like you keep me encouraged :).

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