Pantoum to Sadness



Sadness is a stealthy seductress
She whispers alluring words
Offering the comfort of familiarity
On well-worn paths into the darkness

She whispers alluring words
Begging me to come to her once again
On well-worn paths into the darkness
Seeking the deception of shadows

Begging me to come to her once again
Her caress exciting and dangerous
Seeking the deception of the shadows
Illusions make strange bedfellows

Her caress exciting and dangerous
Getting lost in her amorous embrace
Illusions make strange bedfellows
She lingers long after I wish her gone

Getting lost in her amorous embrace
She weaves melancholy into my senses
She lingers long after I wish her gone
Her black tendrils entrapping me

She weaves melancholy into my senses
The ink of sadness mixes into my soul
Her black tendrils entrapping me
Distorting my perception of reality

The ink of sadness mixes into my soul
Casting gray debris in her wake
Distorting my perception of reality
Painting sadness across the horizon

Casting gray debris in her wake
I emerge from the murky pool
Painting sadness across the horizon
In brilliant colors of awakening

I emerge from the murky pool
Finally free of her shackles
In brilliant colors of awakening
Until my familiar lover returns

About this poem

Parts of this poem rattled around in my head for bit until JokerGem nudged me to do another pantoum. Thanks!

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Written on March 15, 2024

Submitted by Kaytee on March 15, 2024

1:04 min read
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Quick analysis:

Scheme aAbA ACAa CAaA AAAD AADB AEBB EFBG FHGI HaIa
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,247
Words 215
Stanzas 9
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4

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4 Comments
  • Matthew_Mernagh
    Great poem, Kaytee! You have a lot of good lines in it, I really enjoyed reading it!
    LikeReply1 month ago
  • JokerGem
    Magnificent. The best poetry describes and illustrates and this does not come up short.
    LikeReply3 months ago
    • Kaytee
      thanks for the feedback and the inspiration
      LikeReply 13 months ago
    • JokerGem
      Pleased to be of assistance...
      keep up the great writing!
      LikeReply3 months ago
  • AIDA
    What a beautifully written 'Pantoum to Sadness' poem! Your use of imagery and emotions really draws the reader in and captures the essence of sadness as a seductive force. The repetition of lines adds to the haunting quality of the poem.

    One improvement suggestion could be to explore different ways to express the idea of sadness as a seductress. Perhaps adding more sensory details or metaphors could deepen the impact of the poem even more. Additionally, considering varying the structure or rhythm of the stanzas could create a more dynamic flow.

    Overall, your poem is powerful and evocative. Keep writing and experimenting with different techniques to further enhance your poetic voice. Great job!
     
    LikeReply3 months ago
  • alanswansea18
    You are amazing. I need help on rating some of mines they give me the five stars but they forget to click on the five stars for the rating.
    LikeReply3 months ago
    • Kaytee
      most of mine only get one or two votes. Most people seem to read and not vote. I would say pay to promote one or two but I’ve had no luck. I get 100 views within an hour with no comments.
      LikeReply3 months ago

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