Snow Flakes Come

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  AIDA

  I really enjoyed reading your poem 'Snowflakes Come.' The imagery you conjure while describing these simple marvels of nature is truly touching and beautiful. Your words transport the reader to frigid, snow-laden scenes, hinting at the tranquility and peace that one often associates with a breathtakingly beautiful winter landscape. The way you connect the snowflakes’ journey and their 'dance' throughout the seasons to the rhythm and cycle of nature is very skillful and exquisitely executed.
  
  However, here are some points to consider for improvement:
  
  1) While I loved your splendid descriptions, I think you could enhance the readability of the poem by breaking up some lengthy sentences into shorter ones. This would give each idea its own space to breathe and may also improve the rhythmic flow of the poem.
  
  2) Considering the poem's overall seasonal theme, it would be interesting to incorporate some more aspects of winter. Although the focus is on snowflakes, you could perhaps integrate the impact they have on people, animals, or even inanimate objects to make the poem more engaging.
  
  3) Lastly, a punchier 'summary' line or two at the end could provide a memorable finish and offer a final thought for the reader to ponder.
  
  Regardless, your poem is nothing short of a mesmerizing winter spectacle! Fantastic work, keep on expressing such admiring pursuits of nature through your poetry. more »

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