Perpetual Saturday

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  Vixility

  Amen to that! You should be incredibly proud of this piece. Though uncertain of the ’type of loss’ or event being referred to, I could empathize with the real and deep sense and pain—whatever that loss may be.
  
  The imagery you use throughout is painfully eloquent as your poem had me recall the loss of my mom (not too far back) and that of a high school friend who died from a hunting accident.
  
  “Behind my eyes lie damned up rivers” … wow. I mean—wow. I feel that!
  
  I wasn’t certain if this was a coincidence or if you intended for the allusion in the closing stanza … but in that stanza a sense of hope manifests itself as a larks’ song, which immediately reminded me of the line in Emily Dickinson’s poem which reads, “Hope is a thing with feathers”. After having reread your third stanza I thought to myself how interesting it is that this Hope which withdrew returns in the symbol of the lark.
  
  Either way, intended or not, that concluding stanza was perfect.
  
  Anyhow, David, remarkable poem! I think I speak for several people here when I say your works always stick out as gems in these contests. Look forward to reading more … more »

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    David_Zeoli

    Thank you so much! Your comments mean a lot to me.
    I was intentional about not being specific about what the “news” referred to. Though it was something specific to me, I wanted the reader to place their own personal experience into the poem. What a great line by Emily Dickinson. Though the connection with her poem was a coincidence, the lark’s song did represent that “hope” returning and a new day.
    
    Thank you again for reading it and your comments. more »

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  Jewoo525

  Yo David! Man, I was sooo close to giving this my vote! What a fantastic poem. Didn’t know it was yours, but now that I see it, I think I can see slight traces of your “style” (referenced from your last entries).
  
  The structure and overall composition is fantastic, it made me re-read this entry many times before making my final considerations. An objectively excellent poem my friend, you should be very proud of this one. more »

  LikeReply 16 months ago
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    David_Zeoli

    Thank you so much my friend! You are always so kind and uplifting. A real bright spot on this site.

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  JokerGem

  Great motif, solid and inevitabley propitious when followed to the end. I'll be watching for you in the future!

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    David_Zeoli

    Thank You.

    LikeReply 16 months ago