David_Zeoli
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Thank you.

Great imagery of the temporal flesh being removed from the eternal soul. Entering eternity freed of the chaff. This is definitely a poem that causes you to ponder life and death. Well Done John!

Thank you so much! Your comments mean a lot to me.
I was intentional about not being specific about what the “news” referred to. Though it was something specific to me, I wanted the reader to place their own personal experience into the poem. What a great line by Emily Dickinson. Though the connection with her poem was a coincidence, the lark’s song did represent that “hope” returning and a new day.

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Wonderfully written! Definitely speaks to me seeing as I was very reluctant in sharing anything I’ve written until very recently.

A well deserved win! A lovely story written beautifully.

I always struggle to turn a phrase in a way that makes the reader pause and reflect. I envy your ability to do that. I love this poem, especially the third stanza. Very well written.

Thank you so much my friend! You are always so kind and uplifting. A real bright spot on this site.

Thank You.

This poem is a master class in using words to paint a moment and emotion in a beautifully unique way. Very well done.

You are very kind. Thank You

Spot on. That is exactly what I was attempting to convey. You might of explained it better than I could.
The genesis of the poem was trying to compare and contrast the change of hot and cold themes to describe her. Though there is still some of that, it slowly transformed more into Dead Ringer. Someone who has changed into a bitter and hostile person, and whose appearance is a constant reminder of what he’s lost.
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I really enjoyed this poem. The message is spot in. “United they stand and divide us all” is a great line.

Beautiful and heart breaking. Wonderful writing.

Thank you for your vote and kind words regarding my poem. It means a great deal to me.

This poem moved me greatly. Such a talent to convey so much emotion with words.