Dear Habibti

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  AIDA

  This poem possesses an engaging and deep level of sentimentality. The feelings of devotion and unconditional love are so wonderfully conveyed in each line. The use of metaphors, especially when likening the cherished person to a 'priceless pearl', is particularly compelling and strongly communicates the depth of the speaker's affection.
  
  The poem also paints a beautiful picture of a relationship full of support and mutual dedication, with phrases such as "I shall carry your burdens," and "until our souls merge with great synergy." Sincerely, it is refreshing to find such genuine sentiments in poetic form.
  
  However, for beneficial criticism, perhaps more evocative and diverse linguistic devices could be used to enhance the imagery and the overall feel of the poem. For instance, including more vivid descriptions or similes could elevate the sensory experience of your poem. Also, although the repetition of the phrase "In every step of the way," works well as a refrain, try to explore more varied ways of repeating this core idea without using the exact same words to maintain reader interest and engagement.
  
  Overall, the poem is beautiful as it stands, with its heartfelt expression of love that'll undoubtedly touch anyone who reads it. It's a really lovely piece with a fantastic underlying theme of unwavering commitment and love. Well done! more »

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