Good Mourning



I Love You,

An eye-opening face full of reality has missed the last call

So it went, it left a long time ago.

Trapped in this living destiny
Lost its way fate was too blind to see

The truth about being alive
Or the lie they claim that you go to die

Your soul died trapped alive
So the life you have endured is a lie

Torturing and using every living thing around
You could no longer stand to be seen or be around to believe in a helping hand

Help wouldn’t be any good, only prolonging the inevitable disease. Your Life no longer had "get out of jail Free" Passes available to escape

The truth Is your Life a Prison, a punishment, a sick Joke?
Do you know the answer Or the question of Life

There is a place spoken of in a dream before you were ever born
Where all is as it should be in the natural order called for,

A wild, sprawling, changing, productive nerve center for all the Living,

A place called Earth

Where you can see Green, red, blue, clear, Colors

Smelling tasty Scents Seeing exotic vision with clarity,

Feeling happy, sad, and hurt

So many of nature’s special reactions for life to maintain

A healthy order on its surface as it replenishes its inhabitants

Humans, NO! ANIMALS! Different, As every Living thing should be

Though the Earth

Is nothing as it should be,

Nothing makes sense to anyone

Almost; nothing is wild, sprawling, or changing anymore,

Neuropathy is consuming the Earths Productive Nerve Center

Feeling numbness, loss of touch, and an ever-growing changing Pain.

Today the Earth Fades Away;

no more bright beautiful Green,

life-giving Red is just contaminated Rust,

and no more oh so precious Blue in the sky

A time when waters clear liquid lost its sincere Dense Clarity,

now corrupted is the touch of nature, enslaving the Living Today’s Scents are synthetic,
even the natural smells have lost their potency to naturally attract reproductions Natural Cycle

Today

Vision is no longer the main attraction,

It’s not important to See what you are Breeding,

less a coward be a true Animals Nurture ‎

Living on Earth

There have been happy as the time when earth Began,
there were some times when there was a wish it would never end

Other times have been Sad as the time we all loved and lost,
a time when there was a wish our senses never translated

Spirals of educated ignorance shared by the wise, the owl, and Santa
Here to serve a purpose for natures assholes, freaks, or Policeman

Behaviors twisted, personalities lying, people who think less of Animals

The point of what you were reading Is to make you think what have you been doing or not

Do you care if die trying to save you?

Let me know what you think we should do about this reality And always remember I love you

About this poem

I was thinking about everything when i wrote this.

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Written on August 28, 2022

Submitted by Miguelangalindo on July 26, 2023

2:54 min read
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Scheme A X X BB CD CD XX X XX XE F G X B X H X B G B I E J H X X X D B XX I F J G XX XX XI X X A A
Closest metre Iambic heptameter
Characters 2,801
Words 582
Stanzas 41
Stanza Lengths 1, 1, 1, 2, 2, 2, 2, 1, 2, 2, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 2, 1, 1, 1, 1, 2, 2, 2, 1, 1, 1, 1

Miguel A Galindo

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  • AIDA
    Firstly, I genuinely appreciate the raw emotions and the depth of thought in your poem. The manner in which you navigate through the different realities of life and interplay them with emotions is particularly commendable. You have an incredibly creative way of capturing the essence of our life and world around us, and the vivid imagery you generate through your words is emotionally stirring.

    On the more constructive side, I believe your poem could benefit from more precise structuring. A consistent and clear rhythm and rhyme scheme could potentially ease the reader's journey through your profound ideas. It's worth considering showing more and telling less - evoke the emotions in your readers rather than just stating them.

    Additionally, the purpose of your poem is quite profound, but its articulation could be made sharper. It might be beneficial to bring coherence to the different thoughts you are trying to express. It's important for your poem to flow like a river, seamlessly blending one theme into another.

    Lastly, there seems to be some punctuation issues that need attention. Proper punctuation will provide natural pauses, enhancing the overall rhythm of your poem.

    Your talent is undeniable; you have a unique way of voicing your thoughts that is incredibly captivating. Keep that originality. I encourage you to continue writing and refining your skills.
     
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