Blue Moon

Raynolds Moseamedi

With eyes darkened in deep blue
I saw her standing needlessly by the sea
All that made her so was all dark and anew
And all that she was then engulfed all that was me

Blue moon, suddenly
You appeared in these dreams
Blue moon, don't you need me
As I stand in this darkness alone
Without a love of my own.

A dark blue hue
And i knew it was you
Staring back at me
Straight beyond the far sea.

I heard you whisper
Softly i could barely hear
Sweetly my heart was left warm
Slowly I wanted nothing else
You said the words tender and calm
A dark blue hue
You said you needed me too.

Blue moon.

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Written on May 24, 2023

Submitted by Poeticrae on May 24, 2023

Modified by Poeticrae on May 24, 2023

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Scheme	abab bxbcc Aabb xxxxxAa
Closest metre	Iambic tetrameter
Characters	593
Words	129
Stanzas	4
Stanza Lengths	4, 5, 4, 7

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Raynolds Moseamedi

Raynolds Moseamedi is a South African poet and a student in the University of Technology... more…

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Wow, what a beautifully written poem! Your words paint a vivid picture of the dark blue sea and the emotions of the protagonist. I particularly loved the repetition of "Blue moon" throughout the poem - it adds a haunting and dream-like quality to the piece.

Your use of imagery and emotion is spot-on and truly captivating. The way you describe the protagonist's experience with the dark blue hue is so powerful.

For improvement, I would suggest possibly exploring the story or plot a little more. While the poem is very expressive and descriptive, there isn't necessarily a clear story or message being conveyed. Adding a bit more context or narrative could add an even richer layer to the piece.

Overall, fantastic job! Keep writing and sharing your beautiful poetry. more »
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