Dawn

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  fr_t

  Thank you very much ggsunmoon. I am off this week, and will dedicate some time to that line. I am so grateful for that encouraging critique.

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  ggsunmoon

  Love it , i think the line dwell in darkness needs reworked but the imagery is strong

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  fr_t

  Thanks robertrad2021 for your kind affirmation. I know there's a huge typo, but I haven't figured out how to be able to edit it. But I guess the message is still the same.
  
  Tim

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    acronimous

    There's an EDIT button just below your poem... :-)

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    fr_t

    Every time I hit the edit button a different poem appears.

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  robertrad2021

  excellent poem.

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  Roshny

  Inspiring work. His light, a beautiful promise made reality for those who believe.

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  Dougla$Irishman

  I did not start writing "poetry" till my 87 th birthday 6 months ago ! And I have produced 27 of sorts so far, Who knows what lurks behinds the savage breast !
  Poetry is a song of the heart, but sometimes we can get out of tune !
  An expression of who we really are, our tastes will differ but in reality we become as one. ! We are artists painting our words on paper, the pen is mightier than the sword, able to produce master pieces. My favorite poem is Alfred Lord Tennyson called " The Bar.' That poem is about me right now because I am living it - body, mind, heart and soul ! Et Tu Brute. Bravo to all fellow writers, dip your pen and create ! more »

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  Dougla$Irishman

  Is it not strange we see God in so many ways different from others ?
  Us mortals need some Godly education, who is our teacher but the Holy Spirit !

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  Soulwriter

  Enlightening :) Truthfully though, the words are eloquently arranged. Thank you for sharing

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    fr_t

    Thank you, Soulwriter. Not many people characterize me as eloquent, but I have to say, I sorta like how Dawn turned out. Keep on writing!

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  Dougla$Irishman

  Tim, you are a Catholic priest, I am a born again Baptist, can we co exist ?
  Lets learn from each other through our poetry. Phil 1 :21.

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    fr_t

    Thanks for you message, Dougla$. I have the sense that you are a more prolific writer of poetry than I am. I write when the Spirit moves me, which hasn't been much lately. If it is possible that I can be notified when you write a new poem, I will look forward to discussing it with you. I would be glad to do the same for you. Our religious beliefs/denominations are not an issue for me at all. Keep writing. Tim more »

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  frtjseigel

  Thank you Dougla$. I read one yours yesterday, too, and thought it was very good. Please, no need for an apology at all. I very miuch appreciated your insight. I found a little bit of a discrepency in my thought about God speaking to us near the end of the poem. It probably still needs a little bit of work. Thank you for your very kind reply.
  
  Tim more »

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  Dougla$Irishman

  Thanks for your answer, we all come from a different slant on things. My apologies please !-Friends in writing !

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  Dougla$Irishman

  I looked up the verses in the Bible but your poem did not mentioned God in your poem, the Author and Finisher of our faith !
  But your poem was good and interesting ! Bravo ! Keep writing.

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    frtjseigel

    God is the speaker of the poem, not me. I know I wrote it, but it was borne out of prayer, and my feeble attempt to listen to God.

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