Doctorsumitseth's comments

Wonderful thoughts

Have tried to re write your poem in my style

In restless contemplation, I resist the call of sleep,
For in the passing hours, I dread what time may reap.
Though weariness consumes me, and day gives way to night,
I linger in the present, holding onto love so tight.

My greatest apprehension, that slumber steals me away,
While unseen nocturnal creatures in the darkness play.
I persevere in wakefulness, a day or even more,
Observing your serene repose, a love I can't ignore.

In taking leaps toward a love profound and ever deep,
I marvel at your tranquil rest, my heart forever keep.
All I long for is your presence, never to depart,
The thought of losing you, would tear my fragile heart.

Embraced by sorrow, I would grieve, unable to withstand,
The loss of you, my dearest love, as time runs through like sand.
Yet, as I ponder on the brink of night's uncertain shore,
I cherish every fleeting breath, and love you evermore. more »

Impressive poem

I like the way it celebrates the role of music in connecting people, evoking nostalgia, and offering comfort during challenging times. The harmonica player serves as a symbol of the power of music to transcend barriers and foster a sense of community and shared experience. more »

Lovely poem.
It delves into the complexities of the "in between," a state of transition and uncertainty that permeates different aspects of life. It emphasizes the importance of embracing change, vulnerability, and self-trust while navigating these periods of uncertainty. more »