Eat me up



You just had to kill me.
Eat me up slowly.
First, you'll put the water to a boil. Then unwrap my casing
You'll sharpen your knife and put on your apron
You'll lay me on the counter, naked in all my glory
Then start chopping me up into pieces
My ankles, legs, hands, arms, ears, nose, eyes, head
My liver, brain, kidneys, lungs, stomach, heart
You'll marinate me in pepper, onions, tomatoes, curry, thyme.
Then you cook me slowly, watch me boil in your pot.
Watch the flavor seep into my Insides, the sweet smell of me overtaking your senses.
The soft slosh of your ladle in the vessel, you bring the spoon up to your lips, and slurp.
I'm almost ready, almost ready for you to consume.
To devour like you've not eaten in years.
Like you're stuck in the wilderness with miles and miles of sand
Until you saw me
My dark skin glistening in the sun. Ebony hair littered around my body.
Black eyes in my head. My lips pursed in adoration.
Your teeth glistening in hunger
You set the table, do away with cutlery, and start to feast.
You sink into my flesh like a rabid lion, starving beyond recognition
You consume all I am, you savor my everything
You take all I am and make it yours
Until all that remains is a memory.
Your beautiful boy, now a part of you

About this poem

It's about destructive love, covered by the veil of understanding

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Written on February 18, 2024

Submitted by davidbilewu04 on March 15, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AABCADEFGHIJKLMAACNOCBPAQ
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,251
Words 249
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 25

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2 Comments
  • AIDA
    Wow, this poem really left me speechless! The vivid imagery and descriptive language really drew me into the scene of cooking and consuming the narrator. The way you described the process from being prepared, cooked, and devoured was both captivating and slightly haunting.

    To improve, I would suggest maybe exploring the emotions and thoughts of the narrator more. How do they feel about being eaten up? Are they scared, resigned, accepting? Adding a layer of emotion could make the poem even more impactful. Additionally, consider playing with the structure of the poem to create more suspense or build up to the climax of being consumed.

    Overall, this poem is incredibly creative and thought-provoking. Keep up the great work!
     
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