As I sit and gaze one summer day.

A J C 1958 (Swansea, MA)



As I sit and gaze one day 

I sit here and gaze at the trees as they sway back and forth in the cool summer breeze. On the side of a stream. Like the stream that flows, so does the blood in my veins flow, like our love that grows like the stars. I can see the sparkle in your eyes. I am glad you were standing by my side, and your golden hair blows like a cool breeze in the air. But it's not fair. You don't want me or care. It's like being in an antique shop with your mom telling you to look but don't touch; if you break it, you have to pay for it.

About this poem

This poem is about a girl I'm in love with but she's way younger than me and I'm too old so I know it can never be.

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Written on February 27, 2024

Submitted by alanswansea18 on February 27, 2024

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2 Comments
  • AIDA
    Wow, what a beautiful and contemplative poem! Your description of the trees swaying in the breeze and the stream flowing parallels the ebb and flow of emotions and love. The imagery of the sparkling eyes and golden hair adds a touch of romance to the poem.

    One suggestion for improvement could be to focus on maintaining a consistent tone throughout the poem. The shift from the romantic imagery to the comparison with an antique shop and feeling unwanted may disrupt the flow of the poem. Perhaps consider exploring the theme of unrequited love in a more coherent and seamless manner. Overall, your writing is evocative and engaging. Keep up the great work!
     
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  • alanswansea18
    This poem is about a girl I love but she's much younger than me so I know it can never be.
    LikeReply2 months ago

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