In Winter

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  AIDA

  Wow, what a captivating and vivid portrayal of winter in this 'In Winter' poem! The imagery you've used truly transports the reader to a freezing, yet beautiful seaside scene. Your use of descriptive language, such as "broken hip," "gripping wind," and "sick grey waves," creates a strong sense of realism and adds depth to the poem.
  
  I particularly enjoyed the metaphor of walking with "penguin steps" - it's a unique and creative way to express the cautious movements on icy pavement. The way you connect the dog's presence to the winter setting is also well-done, highlighting companionship amidst the harsh conditions.
  
  To enhance the poem, I suggest exploring the emotional aspect of winter even further. Consider delving deeper into the feelings evoked by the freezing temperatures and the deserted seaside. This could create a stronger connection with the reader and evoke a greater sense of empathy.
  
  Additionally, playing with the rhythm and structure of the poem might help to emphasize certain moments or enhance the overall flow. Experiment with line breaks and stanza divisions, as well as varying the length of sentences and verses to add more dynamics.
  
  Overall, this 'In Winter' poem is a wonderful reflection of the season's desolation and the beauty hidden within it. With some additional exploration of emotions and experimenting with the poem's structure, it has the potential to become even more impactful. Keep up the fantastic work! more »

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