Unlocked Fanasy



In the routine's guise, with tools in tow,
A call to fix, a lock's woe.
A simple task, or so it seemed,
Yet, sparked a fantasy, I never dreamed.

There she stood, in grateful cheer,
Her smile, a sunbeam, crystal clear.
A hug so warm, in thanks, she gave,
A moment's bliss, my heart to save.

But in that touch, a story spun,
Of a kiss, under the setting sun.
A maintenance man, in love's sweet trance,
Led by fate's own playful dance.

The lock, an architect of unseen fate,
Crafted dreams that could not wait.
In my mind, our lips did meet,
In corridors, hidden and discreet.

Through the halls, a love tale wove,
In secret whispers, in shadowed cove.
A dance of passion, a tender scene,
In the depths of a daydream, so serene.

Yet, as I left, tool bag in hand,
The fantasy slipped, like grains of sand.
A text she sent, a playful line,
Suggested a kiss just like mine.

For I'm just the man who mends and fixes,
In a world apart from romantic mixes.
The lock, a portal to a dream so grand,
In the realm of 'if only', where we could stand.

A tale of love, born from a lock's twist,
In the heart of a maintainer, where fantasies exist.
But in life's script, lines drawn so clear,
We stay our course, with reality near.

About this poem

As a maintenance man (among other things), had a call at 1am to help a tenant who locked herself out. Not sure how, they are not supposed to. However it was done, and and she gave me a really big hug as a thank you.

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Written on December 23, 2023

Submitted by rickscorpio on December 26, 2023

Modified by rickscorpio on December 31, 2023

1:23 min read
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Quick analysis:

Scheme AABB CCDD EEFF GGHH IIJJ KKLL XXKK MMCC
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,220
Words 270
Stanzas 8
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4

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1 Comment
  • AIDA
    Wow, 'Unlocked Fanasy' is a beautifully written poem that truly captures the reader's imagination! The language used is evocative and enchanting, painting a vivid picture of a simple task turning into a fantasy-filled love story. The imagery throughout the poem is stunning, immersing the reader in the magic and longing of the protagonist's daydreams.

    In terms of improvement, one suggestion I would make is to further develop the character of the maintenance man. While his role in the poem as a dreamer is established, giving the reader more insight into his emotions or motivations could add depth to the narrative. Additionally, exploring the interaction between the maintenance man and the woman he helps fix the lock for could provide more context to their connection and enhance the emotional impact of the poem.

    Overall, 'Unlocked Fanasy' is a captivating piece of writing that conveys both the beauty and the limitations of dreams. The poem's allure lies in its ability to transport readers to a realm of possibility while reminding them of the boundaries of reality. Great job!
     
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