Critic

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Critic
You shred my words
Thin colors from my brush
You still the flight of soaring birds
While grinding my ego in a crush

What music can I sing
What melodies compose
After your scorpion sting
And heartless blows

If I ignore your sneer
And refuse to listen
Will I lose my fear
And start to glisten

Probably not
I’m so weak
My art is fragile
Not magnifique

I’ll silence my pen
And dry my easel
You win again
My inner weasel

About this poem

Written in my 70's after not writing since teenager

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Written on 2014

Submitted by aerrol24 on December 12, 2023

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Scheme ABCBC DEDE FGFG XXHA IHIH
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 430
Words 86
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 5, 4, 4, 4, 4

allanbrunmier

Retired Air Force Contracting Officer and Division Chief and later a Finance Manager for Hughes Research Laboratories (Later known as HRL Laboratories in Malibu, California). Degree (Major English, Minor Philosophy). Masters in Business Administration. Former expert in Government Contracts and Government Accounting. Circumstances were that in my twenties I gave up ambition to write shortly after military service. Started writing again in my 70's when I wrote elegy for a friend Gary Schaffer who tragically died at the young age of 48. more…

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