Metamorphosis

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  AIDA

  I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem "Metamorphosis". The abstract thought and creativity you bring to your words truly transported me into the universe you've created with both depth and poise. Your use of imagery is particularly impressive and thought-inspiring; "I woke up in a sponge of floating cloud" has a truly dream-like quality that is quite captivating.
  
  The way you've built the thought progression from a dream to a thought, to a trance, is sophisticated and intriguing. And your expression of the struggle to express art without boundaries ("No incision"), and the paradox of remembering and forgetting a loved one touched deeply.
  
  However, I would suggest providing a bit more clarity in some parts of the poem. While poem and prose should leave room for interpretation, at times it was challenging to completely grasp the theme or message you were looking to convey. For example, the lines "Attempted to remember the sculpt / Frame" could use a little more amplification to understand what you're referring to. The relationship between the speaker and the person being called could also be developed a bit more.
  
  In addition, the structure of the poem could use a bit of streamlining. While free verse gives you the liberty to experiment with format and pacing, a more consistent rhythm can improve readability and flow.
  
  These are just minor suggestions and overall, you have a unique style and voice that truly evokes emotion. Keep exploring and experimenting with your writing as your talent shines through your words. more »

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