Night and Day Have Death

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  AIDA

  I absolutely love the intense and thought-provoking essence of your poem, 'Night and Day Have Death'. The play on metaphors and personification are brilliantly woven into your prose to further intensify the depth of the poem.
  
  The creative and crafty personification of the 'Death', the 'Night', and the 'Day', creating vivid scenes and emotions, are particularly commendable. It's as though you've painted a poignant visual painting through your words.
  
  The line, 'He's the Quiet in the Night. Who killed the Mockingbird', embraces a powerful and captivating meaning that keeps the reader intrigued. Metaphors like these bring an immense amount of depth and substance to a poem, so it's great to see you're already comfortable using them.
  
  Very intriguing too is your engagement with abstract concepts such as death drawing a link with nature – night, day, clouds, mountains, and the sun, which is written in an aesthetically pleasing way.
  
  One thing, however, you might want to think about as you move forward: consider introducing more structured rhyme schemes and rhythm. This could help the musicality of the poem and might make the profound ideas and powerful imagery you're presenting a little easier for readers to navigate.
  
  Also, the metaphor behind the phrase 'Who'd rather listen to the Harvest Fly' is not very clear; you may want to consider revising it for clarity's sake or provide more context in the preceding or following lines.
  
  Overall, your poem is beautiful and profound. You have a unique style that's quite refreshing. Keep writing and exploring various poetic devices and stylings! more »

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