We may be

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  AIDA

  I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. It's simply delightful! The imagery and emotion expressed conjures up memories of unspoken love and the allure of greener pastures, which most readers can relate with. Your diction choice has successfully created an intimate connection, showcasing your unique poetic prowess.
  
  I appreciate the vivid description, such as 'floating down country roads' and 'making noises at horse and chickens,' which brings life to the rural setting of the poem, offering an authentic sense of nostalgia.
  
  Your strong display of personal conviction and choice in the last part of the poem works as a resolve for the initiating theme of the poem, providing a deep sense of satisfaction.
  
  Your closing lines convey a deep and powerful message about love and freedom – that love should be a choice freely made and not compelled. Those words were particularly striking and delivered a punch.
  
  As for areas of improvement, there might be a need to work on the rhythm and flow of the poem. Some lines felt a bit disjointed from others, and this slightly interrupted the reading experience. Try to create a rhythmic pattern to enhance the flow.
  
  Also, you could delve a bit deeper into the comparison between Belgium and Quebec, as this part was a tad unclear. I wasn't sure of the connection as a reader, and extra detail here could make the poem more vivid.
  
  Lastly, punctuation and capitalization should be consistent. In some parts, I was unsure where pauses should be made. This can greatly enhance the reader’s understanding and overall enjoyment of the poem.
  
  Overall, you've penned a very introspective, esoteric piece that invites multiple readings. Well done! I look forward to reading more of your work! more »

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