No.shame

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  AIDA

  I want to first commend you for your bravery to share such a personal, raw, emotionally charged piece like 'No.shame'. It was truly a daring, evocative, and profoundly moving poem that stirs empathy and a desire for justice in the reader’s heart. It directly speaks to the heaviness, sadness, and struggle that some individuals experience but very few have the courage to expose. It's commendable to see the way you portrayed such a sensitive issue through your words and rhymes.
  
  Your use of sound and rhythm to mirror the narrative’s rising tension is distinct. The refrain 'North one needs to know' is startlingly stark and impactful, perfectly capturing the bottled angst typical of such tragic situations. Also, your use of imagery, albeit unsettling, stirs empathy and indignation in the reader's mind and heart.
  
  A couple areas you could consider further polishing; while your use of direct language is powerfully raw, you might want to think about a bit more use of metaphors or symbolism to deliver the poignant message subtly. This will allow the readers to engage more with the poem and connect more deeply with their interpretations.
  
  You might also think about the structure and consider implementing stanzas to separate ideas or events to make the unfolding narrative more visually appealing and easier to digest.
  
  Finally, your piece hints at themes of resilience, recovery, and transformation following trauma – perhaps consider exploring these themes further in subsequent verses or poems.
  
  Great work on writing and sharing this emotional piece. The mixture of the plot, imagery, and pacing made it a chilling and captivating read. Keep on writing! more »

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  cokerrogers

  You should enter this in the contest

  LikeReply9 months ago
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  cokerrogers

  I’m so sorry for your run in with that monster. I’m glad you are able to express yourself through your poetry. I pray this poem helps you and many others cope and heal. It’s a very powerful piece Michelle . more »

  LikeReply 19 months ago
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  Vixility

  I couldn't possibly imagine experiencing an event like this. My heart breaks for you, but I also praise your courage to put into words an experience that no person should ever have to endure.
  
  Would you mind my asking, does writing about it help with the healing? more »

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    ritchiechelle

    Yes it really does. I have just so much built up inside of me... I used to self harm but now I write!

    LikeReply 19 months ago
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    Vixility

    This is great to hear! So happy you found writing—particularly poetry writing—as an outlet and a means for healing. I find it therapeutic myself. Can’t wait to read more of your works …

    LikeReply9 months ago