How the other half live

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  cokerrogers

  Lovely piece Michelle . It gives me a sense of hope that I may one day have the same but even if not I will still appreciate the other half from this side. Beautiful. :)

  LikeReply9 months ago
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  AIDA

  Wow, what a beautiful and heartwarming poem titled "How the Other Half Live"! Your positive energy shines through the lines and it truly left me feeling touched and hopeful. The way you capture the journey of love, creation, and family is simply enchanting.
  
  I particularly love how you express the transition from two to three, and then three to four, symbolizing the growth of a family and the depth of love that continues to expand. The use of rhyming couplets adds a delightful rhythm to the poem and makes it flow seamlessly.
  
  In terms of improvement suggestions, I would recommend exploring more vivid and descriptive language in certain parts of the poem. For example, when describing the transformations from lover to parent, and from parent to grandparent, you could add more specific details or metaphors to enhance the imagery and emotional impact.
  
  Also, consider experimenting with varied sentence structures or poetic devices to maintain the reader's engagement throughout the poem. This could be achieved by incorporating enjambment, alliteration, or repetition to add depth and musicality to your already wonderful piece.
  
  Overall, "How the Other Half Live" is a beautiful and relatable poem that celebrates the joys of family, love, and the circle of life. Keep up the great work, and I can't wait to read more of your inspiring creations in the future! more »

  LikeReply9 months ago
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  riskx

  Kudos. Well written!

  LikeReply 19 months ago