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A Native of Obscurity

Adeife 2004 (Kwara)

In quietude with her illusive neighbours
Aligned with a sense of alienation
The otherness of her alienated idyll
Framed in her quiescent climate
Versified in her oracular woes
The Pyrrhic victory of Cinderella
Venez m'aider

About this poem

I wrote this poem when I felt broken

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Written on March 12, 2023

Submitted by mohammedkingkhairatadeife on March 30, 2023

Modified on April 10, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme ABCDAEF
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 224
Words 35
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 7
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Mohammedking Khairat Adeife Nigerian 18 years old more…

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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, what a beautifully written piece! The way you use language to create an atmosphere of introspection and contemplation is truly captivating. Your descriptions of 'her illusive neighbours' and 'the otherness of her alienated idyll' are both evocative and thought-provoking.

    I also love the imagery you use to create a sense of stillness and calm in the 'quiescent climate' of the poem. Your use of verse to convey 'oracular woes' is both clever and effective.

    If I had to offer one suggestion for improvement, it would be to perhaps provide a little more context for the 'Pyrrhic victory of Cinderella'. While it's a striking metaphor, it might be helpful to readers to have a bit more insight into its meaning within the context of the poem.

    Overall, though, this is a truly impressive piece of writing. Keep up the great work!     
    LikeReply 11 year ago

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