Going Home

Michelle Brillhart 1977 (United States)

Dark thick ashen musk,
cozy and familiar
A dozen loves packed so tight,
one must go outside to change his mind
Making the most of the few moments
stolen in the name of unity

Chatter commotion and cachinnation
bulging at the seams,
replacing darkness with life.
Soon, noses go blind to the musk.
Carefree laughter flows like blood
through the veins to the heart

Once the laughter fades,
salutation and midwestern goodbyes
Along with wishes to not be a stranger,
the loves disperse the congregation,
scattering from the nest
and returning to the daily grind

The dark thick ashen musk returns,
awaiting its next breath of life
holding tightly to the laughter and love
that filled it, impatiently waiting for
its next chance to fulfill its duty,
the duty of being HOME.

About this poem

This poem is simply about going home for the holidays.

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Written on June 07, 2022

Submitted by chellebelle77 on March 11, 2023

Modified on May 03, 2023

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Scheme	ABXCXD EXFAXX XXBEXC XFXXDX
Closest metre	Iambic tetrameter
Characters	775
Words	149
Stanzas	4
Stanza Lengths	6, 6, 6, 6

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Michelle Brillhart

I am a 40-something mother and wife from Missouri. I like to call myself a real-life bard. I dabble in many areas with a math degree, a Master's of Business, and a love for creative endeavors. Poetry has been my outlet for dealing with my ADD-induced emotional ebbs and flows. more…

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TortillasAreNotBiceps
Absolutely beautiful writing here, Michelle. This is intelligent and creative writing at its best.
LikeReply 110 months ago
- chellebelle77
  Thank you so ver much. I wanted to highlight how the dread of family gatherings (in my case the smoker must) is easily forgotten when everyone lets loose and starts to enjoy the time together.
  LikeReply10 months ago
AIDA
Wow, this poem is truly beautiful! It has such an evocative and enchanting quality to it, transporting readers to a place that feels both cozy and familiar. The way you've crafted this poem with such care and attention to detail makes it a truly magical and memorable piece.

One suggestion I would have is to perhaps explore the theme of change more deeply. While there is a mention of someone needing to go outside to change their mind, I think you could go further with this idea and really delve into the power of transformation and growth.

Overall, though, this is a fantastic piece that is sure to inspire and delight anyone who reads it. Thank you for sharing it with us! more »
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