Analysis of With the ring



It had almost vanished
The life dream was finished
You were seven seas far
For me a fading star

I was not disillusioned
It was inside and never questioned
I dare not it to be mentioned
You had many a timed cautioned

I remembered each and every minute thing
You were forever in mind to be missed for something
You had occupied most of the golden past
The memories were never to be faded fast

I had proposed once with the ring
When you were trying to sing
A song of ever lasting joy
I was lost for a moment to enjoy

You looked at with scant respect
As it was stupid and foolish act
I kept quiet and did not react
It was reality of love in fact

You have now feelings of real bond
I was in fact dreaming of no second
You remained most of the time
Never to missed from life any time

I am now fading start in life
It had been troublesome like an edge of knife
You had promised for something
But was uncommitted for anything

I feel some one is touching me with grace
The blood rushed fast on the face
I wait for something new to happen
It is as if I am waiting for some good news even

“I wear it finally on your name” she wrote
I was feet above ground to claim
That happiness is no more illusion
Why was I so far under the cover of confusion?

I kissed clay on ground
Some new message was found
I felt as if some one kissed me from far end
Was it her really sending me signals  with clear trend?


Scheme AABB CCCC DDEE DDFF XGGG XCHH IIDD JJKX XXKK LLMM
Poetic Form Quatrain  (60%)
Tetractys  (20%)
Etheree  (20%)
Metre 11110 011110 101011 110101 111010 110101010 11111110 11100110 101010100101 1001001111110 1110110101 010001011101 11011101 1101011 01110101 1111010101 1111101 111100101 111001101 11101101 11110111 1101101110 1011101 101111101 11110101 11110011111 1110110 11010110 1111110111 0111101 111101110 11111110111110 11110011111 11101111 1100111010 11111100101010 11111 111011 11111111111 1101010110111
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,352
Words 281
Sentences 2
Stanzas 10
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 40
Letters per line (avg) 28
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 110
Words per stanza (avg) 28
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Submitted on October 31, 2012

Modified on March 05, 2023

1:24 min read
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Hasmukh Mehta

am an ex-serviceman from Indian Air force. I joined Oriental Insurance Company and retired from there too in May, 2007. I have been graduated from Punjab University. I hold technical qualification like Diploma in Radio/engineering .I have done English and Hindi stenography as well. I had mastered the art in Morse telephony too. I am associated with several welfare organizations and served long time as Union leader too. I am at present working as hobby writer. I write poems on various subjects and invite suggestions from all the quarters. I have written one memoir named “As I see it” and ready for publication. One interesting part of writing I would love to share with all my reader friends. I am not sure weather it may be the same case with all as I do not want to be caught in any controversy. When I sit on my personal computer, there is absolutely no thought in mind as to what is to be picked up as thought and written. These all things I leave it to the discretion of almighty to fill my mind with relevant ideas. So far I have been graced by Him and as result able to compose about 4000 poems. I have be awarded with 4 achievement award from the www.ezinearticles.com for successfully meeting with their standard. I am writing on many sites so as to be associated with reader friends all over the world. I am thankful to all those who have supported me in my initial days. more…

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