Analysis of Desert Dance (Revised)



Adultery is the crime for which I now stand
Buried to the neck and bound. The true
Criminal: buried beside me to his waist, in
Desert sand. Masha'Allah*, may the innocent
Escape more pain. I see that it is written!
First, tilt chin to right and left. Soon, I will
Go. This man deserves no escape, but I
Hate him not, for I can dance. Head slides:
In a circle. Oven heat burns charcoal eyes.
Just watch the sand fall. I will live after all.
Knuckle undulations-feel patience in agony.
Lift and drop chest, with blood on my face.
My thief watches, more lust than imagination;
Nothing but blood can he love, not even life.
Oh, justice is sweet! Shoulder circles, hands
Perfectly still. He is angry. Twist hands. He
Questions his Writer. I will ask no questions.
Rip the cords with long, sharp finger nails.
Slow chest circles, iron snake arms, with a
Twisting of hips, and freedom is breathing
Under the sand, I feel it. My arms are strong.
Vibrations of the knees, for strings, and omis*.
Writer, I pray, write me well. Know my worth.
Slow ankle circles. I untie myself. Thank you!
Xenolith no longer am I, now free to shine.
You see? The guilty will not go free. I see his
Zealous anger. He will die, yet I'm alive-Maktub!*

*"Masha'Allah" means "if Allah wills it". This phrase is used to discuss anything that will happen in the future, as Allah "writes" all things that will happen, in Islam.

*An "omi" is a common Middle Eastern dance movement.

*"Maktub" means "It is written" or "Allah wills it".


Scheme XAXBCXXDXXEXCXXEXXXXXDXAXXX X B X
Poetic Form Tetractys  (20%)
Metre 010010111111 101010101 100100111110 101110100 01111111110 1111101111 1110110111 111111111 0010101111 11011111101 1011100100 101111111 11101110010 10111111101 1101110101 10011110111 10110111110 101111101 1110101110 1011010110 10011111111 0101011101 1011111111 11010101111 1110111111 110101111111 101011111011 1111011111110110111000101101111110001 1110101010110 11111011011
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,470
Words 272
Sentences 38
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 27, 1, 1, 1
Lines Amount 30
Letters per line (avg) 38
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 285
Words per stanza (avg) 68
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Submitted on May 02, 2011

Modified on March 05, 2023

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