Analysis of Being With You



My first encounter left me without enough time
To breathe you in.
I was sent tumbling down mountains of torment,
And was flooded with emotions in a torrential
Storm that threatened to efface me
From whom I was familiar with---a shell of myself.

A tidal rush of emotion poured through my body,
And sent an electrical shock to my fragile heart.
Faster and faster it would beat
Until I was sure it would shatter violently.
With just one smile you engorged me
With new life, new hope, a new purpose.

I envision a time when you
Can rest your head on my shoulder
While we watch the sun go down in the distance.
Swathes of purple, red, and orange paint the sky.
And out of the corner of my eye
I see you smiling.  I am happy.


Scheme XXXXAX AXXAAX XXXBBA
Poetic Form
Metre 110101101011 1110 11110011011 0110101000010 11101011 111101010111 0101101011110 0110100111101 10010111 0111111101000 1111111 111110110 10100111 11111110 11101110010 11101010101 011010111 111101110
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 702
Words 137
Sentences 9
Stanzas 3
Stanza Lengths 6, 6, 6
Lines Amount 18
Letters per line (avg) 31
Words per line (avg) 8
Letters per stanza (avg) 188
Words per stanza (avg) 46
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Submitted on May 01, 2011

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Drew Gorman

I'm Drew and I like to write poetry. I also enjoy reading about and discussing history, philosophy, and religion. I like to run and exercise. I also LOVE my amazing girlfriend Rosaura! more…

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