Analysis of A Shrill in the Car



A gamut of green, blue and red,
It was in the insignia of the car's windshield,
And sped.
She stopped,
Her blind son's eyes bled,
Her car turned,
Then she read.
Her crunching mouth was fed,
She couldn't hear a slither,
As her snack wrapper and music was spread.
"Hail Mary," she said,
Then began the next line to song:
"A serpent, stake, nor foul spell, not fate. She comes with love and duties to state..."
She sung as the gas station was near,
And fed.
She looked and saw the young one ahead,
No child's seat,
But it was green and the blanket blue.
He wasn't weak as a sheep,
But a shepherd she knew.
Her snack now done,
She grabbed another one.
Child's laughter driven beside her car was there too,
Something fun,
Even how she sang...
A hiss from her hair or air,
It wasn't her song or son,
But it groped tightly until she couldn't feel her tongue. It was all grace,
Until this moment
Where she saw the enemy's face
Black with red lights blinking.
She could only be slow to thinking,
And not free to fate.
She couldn't swerve,
It was to late,
Nor brake.
But strangely enough
Before it was to late
She heard a yell from Hell
And a laughter from her son waving to the child ahead,
She held on.
She felt as if a snake were all around her,
Even she pulled her own hair.
It wasn't real.
Her son took the wheel,
It was the first time he could steer.
His mother was choking
And her son pulled off aside the road
With no fear.
His eyes were open,
But still unspoken.
He grabbed a knife and pen to open her windpipe
And saved her life,
Seeing blood drip from his eyes and a single tear. "That's it!" she gasped for air,
The food now in her hair.
"But son!" she said, "how is it you see, steer, even with no fear?"
"It was her!" he said, "Mary with young Jesus, then sped."
She looked at him as if she were from the dead.


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Poetic Form
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Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,827
Words 369
Sentences 28
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 58
Lines Amount 58
Letters per line (avg) 24
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 1,420
Words per stanza (avg) 355

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From: I AM A MAN AS I SHOULD BE: POEM BOOK 1, AT AMAZON

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Submitted by RonaldBunch on July 29, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Ronald-Bunch

ronaldbunch.com He did volunteer work, goes to church, reads, and likes long walks. He's a self published writer and poet. He's getting his GED and will graduate at Grand Rapids (USA) community college. Activity: Ronald Lee Bunch published his poetry book called I Am A Man As I should be on create space September 1st, 2014 (Paper Back) and August 31, 2014 (Kindle Edition) Audio book is now available at amazon. Interests: Writing, reading, walking. Favorite book types: Fantasy and writer/author biographies. Some of the books he read: Mainspring (Clockwork Earth #1), The Magician's Nephew (Chronicles of Narnia), The Holiness of God, The Outsiders, Clash of the Titans, Gulliver's Travels, Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets (Harry Potter #2), The Four Signs of a Dynamic Catholic, Crossfire, Outland, Krull, The Red King (Star Trek: Titan, #2), Icerigger #1, Spellsinger, Flinx's Folly (Pip & Flinx #9), Battle Surgeons (Star Wars: Clone Wars, #4), The Silmarillion, The Lord of The Rings, The Hobbit, David Copperfield. more…

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