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Poemetric
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I have always been interested in math and science along with poetry, but have had a very difficult journey with composition in general. Texting on devices changed that for me. This is my 1st serious poem, 2nd altogether. I enjoy working on my geometrical art, developing my Chess variants, playing them and playing chess as well, besides reading poetry and working on my own. Without high functioning atypical Autism, I doubt I would be able to have achieved the things I have achieved and will achieve in my future.

  August 2022     12 days ago

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Patience of Heaven

Create a world now.
See it begin anew.
Watch its parts move to and fro,
Going here, going there,
Doing what they do, this and that,
Living, breathing, loving, hating,
Feeling joy, sorrow, anger, wonder.
Wonder what will become of it?
Always...

– by N. L.

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1) Being that the poem was divided into verses, the verses were relatively even and done effectively.
2) It seemed to me the grammar was done well creating a good flow.
3) The writer also chose to rhyme the 2nd and 4th lines of each verse as separate pairs and maintained that sequence throughout the poem.
4) The word choice was also done very well creating a feeling of connection the reader can have with the parent's pain, eventual peace and the conflict the writer feels between the two.
5) The poem continually has a direction, clear and precise. Although the writer possibly didn't use any metaphor and simile that I see, they may be appropriate and good in a poem, but I feel that they need to be clear and precise in one way or another. Many poems in this contest have metaphor or simile, but throughout many of those poems it was difficult to tell what the writers meant at all. Some other poems that may have not had any metaphor or simile, were also difficult t decipher what the intended meaning was.
6) Finally, "The Treehouse" was not unnecessarily long, but was also seemingly complete in the story the writer has to tell, even bringing the poem to a close with a clear and precise resolution.
7) There were other poems that were also done well overall, however, I felt none could connect the reader to the writer like this one.

Of the poems I could vote on, I feel "The Treehouse" has the most meaning overall and fits all the criteria I have mentioned. It is my 

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