Dystopia Under a Utopic Sky



Clouds paint an ashen sky,
with fine brush strokes   
that begin as feathery ephemeral wisps,
then transmute to fluffy cotton wool balls.   

Stratus strides his boldness -
hues of pure white
blending into deepening blues reaching outwards,
before forming into Nimbostratus.

The Altocumulus
likes the patchwork-
patterns of curls and swirls so graceful and serene
that soar upwards becoming lost in sun.

Cirrocumulus clouds
paint their motifs -
rainbow hues so exquisitely celestial
grazing serenely on airy pastures.

Cumulonimbus now
bosses in and
splashes his darkening mood evoking drama,
morphing into creatures fierce and thund’ry.

But …
Below this utopic
sea of delights
grave grey pavements bear the wear and tear of traffic -
forging dystopian dispositions.

About this poem

This poem was an exercise in teaching my students how to use imagery and juxtaposition.

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Submitted by susannaelliott on February 10, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme ABBX XXXB BXXX XXXX XXXX XAXXX
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 773
Words 132
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 5

Susanna Elliott-Newth

Susanna is a teacher, living near the coastal fringes of the Illawarra Coastline in NSW, Australia. Her environment is her stimulus for her writing. She has published four books of short stories, as well as her own memoir book, and writes educational resources for teachers. more…

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  • rcrosson1201
    I like the focus on clouds, their beauty captivates me.
    I envision the clouds I see so often, trying to remember the names.
    I think it's unique and well written.
    LikeReply1 month ago
  • DrewHarrisonBooks
    I love your use of imagery--your descriptions are almost painterly! The contrast with the world below is effectively done, and all the more punchy for how abrupt it all ends.

    I wonder how much different the world might be if people looked up more often? 
    LikeReply1 month ago

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