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Mirror

Amanda K lessig

When you can't stand the person looking back at you anymore
When you leave all your riches and would rather be poor
Inside I know it's wrong but I want to settle the score
Just last night you couldn't live without me
Now today you have a new whore
All the suffering I endured
Hoping and praying our love was pure
You played me like a chess game
I should have realized years ago when the pain first came
Instead I praised you and let myself die
To believe you ever had my back was such a lie
I hope one day you feel all my fears
I pray one day you cry all my tears
Forgive me, I know I'm wrong
Still I wish you stay lost never knowing where you belong
So that you can feel the wrath of me
My pain because you never let me be free
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Submitted by amandak.45897 on March 09, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme ABACADEFFGGHIJJCCJ
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 732
Words 152
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 18
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2 Comments
  • alanswansea18
    alanswansea18
    I love real poems.
    LikeReply 118 days ago
    • amandak.45897
      amandak.45897
      agreed. Your poetry is always real. Thank u
      LikeReply18 days ago
  • AIDA
    AIDA
    This poem is filled with raw emotion and powerful imagery that really resonates with the reader. The use of language is strong and conveys a sense of betrayal and hurt. The honesty in the words is palpable and makes for a compelling read.

    One suggestion for improvement would be to work on the flow and rhythm of the poem. Some lines feel a bit choppy and could benefit from some restructuring to enhance the overall reading experience. Additionally, consider playing around with different poetic devices such as metaphors or symbolism to add depth to the emotions being expressed.

    Overall, great job on capturing the intense feelings of betrayal and heartbreak in this 'Mirror' poem. Keep writing and experimenting with different techniques to continue to refine your poetic voice. Well done!     
    LikeReply1 month ago

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