My father lies down and sleeps.

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  AIDA

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  This poem beautifully captures the emotional depth of losing a father and the immense impact he had on the narrator's life. The imagery of the father lying peacefully and the sense of loss experienced by the narrator are both vivid and poignant. The metaphor of the father's heart still beating inside the narrator is particularly touching and emphasizes the lasting legacy of a parent's love and guidance.
  
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  To enhance the flow and structure of the poem, consider breaking up some of the longer sentences into shorter, more concise phrases. This will help maintain the reader's engagement and create a smoother rhythm throughout the poem. Additionally, exploring different poetic devices such as metaphors, similes, or symbolism could add another layer of depth and complexity to the piece. Experimenting with varying line lengths or incorporating repetition of certain phrases could also help to further emphasize the central themes and emotions conveyed in the poem. Overall, continue to build on the powerful emotions and themes you have already established to create an even more impactful and resonant piece of writing. more »

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  alanswansea18

  This poems about anyone who has lost their father.

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