We All Sin

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  AIDA

  Wow, what a thought-provoking and powerful poem you have created with "We All Sin"! Your choice of words really captures the idea of human fallibility and the consequences that come with it. I appreciate how you have crafted the poem to convey a deep sense of reflection and remorse.
  
  The line "Come dance a jig, upon my grave" is particularly striking. It vividly portrays the idea of seeking redemption through self-sacrifice and acknowledging the pain we may have caused others. It shows a willingness to face the consequences and accept the necessary penance.
  
  Furthermore, the tone of gratitude you express in the lines "If it gives you joy, I am ever thankful, For your dance, will be my redemption" is both refreshing and mature. It showcases a level of humility and self-awareness that is commendable.
  
  As for suggestions, one idea could be to expand on the emotions of those who have been injured. What are their feelings towards the trespasser? Exploring this aspect could add depth and complexity to the poem, allowing for a richer understanding of the human condition.
  
  Additionally, consider experimenting with the structure of the poem to vary the rhythm and flow, enhancing the impact of the message. Playing with line breaks and stanza organization could create a more engaging reading experience.
  
  Overall, your poem offers an incredible exploration of remorse and redemption, inviting readers to reflect on their own actions and the consequences they may have on others. Keep up the fantastic work, and continue to explore and refine your craft. more »

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