The Morning Fog

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  npirandy

  Good job! I too find something very mystical about the fog. It's kind of like clouds. You can create your own mystery about them. That's what creative people like you do.

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    emergentauthor

    Thank you so much for looking at my work and giving my poem "The Morning Fog" such a high rating!!! Really appreciate the support. And thank you for your compassion in regard to the situation with my mom. Yes, I've met many people who don't understand what it's like to have such an abusive mom. But I lucked out with my dad, so I guess it evens out. :) I think God allowed me to go thru a unique situation to strengthen my relationship with Him and to give me a better perspective on good and evil so that I could write about it. more »

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  emergentauthor

  Thank you, everyone! Thanks Vixility, shivferguson, and JokerGem for your kind words and compliments!!! Your support makes my day; thank you for picking my poem. I will be entering the competition again and will be putting more of my work on the site including advertisements for the science fiction magazine I write poems and stories for. If you are a fan of mine and have not, please check out my other titles on poetry.com as well. Thank you. :) more »

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  Vixility

  This poem … wow. So well written. The scenic imagery throughout thoroughly drew me in—I felt literally ‘there’. Vivid, euphoric and mystifying easily describe the feel.
  
  I was especially delighted with the razor-sharp contrast of the ending which subtly introduced our finitude, and death (I’ve always thought the ephemeral and fleeting reality of our existence to be the highest poetic subject there is).
  
  All that sensory information in so little space, absolutely impressive. Excellent work! more »

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    Vixility

    Thief in the night, the rapture … even better than death’s eventuality. Again, excellent work.

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    emergentauthor

    Thanks so much, Vixility! I was inspired by the famous end times chapter of the Bible, Matthew 24, where Jesus talks about the destuction of the temple as well as verses from 1 Thessalonians and Daniel 12:2 inspired the third stanza. And yes, ha, ha, I agree that the rapture is better, because I think I personally would rather be taken up in the clouds and part of the generation that never dies than to wait for 'death's eventuality.' more »

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    emergentauthor

    I'm of the school of thought that poetry, and writing in general, should be alive. I'm glad that's how you felt because that means I'm achieving my goal of immersing the reader into the worlds that I create, which is what much of my writing does. I like to equate my descriptiveness to the style of H.P. Lovecraft and Hayao Miyazaki; both of them are inspirations for my craft. As far as the ending, I like to write poems with movement that take the reader from one place to another, both literally and metaphorically, and I'm a traditionalist when it comes to writing sonnets. I'm working on a collection of sonnets, which are my specialty, and I like showcasing the traditional turn either in the final couplet or in between the octave and the sestet via the volta. It's the equivalent of turning on a light switch in the reader's head to make them see something in a unique way or a miniature punch in the gut to jolt them into a new kind of thought. more »

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  shivferguson

  I like the imagery, it is easy to picture in your mind. The structure is a poem not prose. I think it has a great ending.

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    emergentauthor

    Thank you! The morning fog always spurs my imagination to life and makes me think of creatures and other worlds hiding underneath the white canopy. Daniel 12:2 inspired the image of the dead in Christ in rising like people pulling up white vapor blankets. more »

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  JokerGem

  This should be published if it‘s not already...an accomplishment to be sure!

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    Vixility

    100% agree

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    emergentauthor

    Thank you so much!

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