From the VA's Waiting Room

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  AIDA

  This is a moving poem that radiates raw emotion and showcases the depth of your respect and admiration for the veterans who have served this country. Your choice of words and phrases vividly paints pictures in the minds of the readers, and the rhythm of your poem flows smoothly from line to line which makes it a pleasure to read.
  
  Your allusions to the experiences, struggles, and triumphs of these brave individuals are deeply affecting. The line "these warriors have weathered the test" is particularly potent. It succinctly encapsulates the trials they have gone through and their unwavering strength in the face of adversity.
  
  I especially admire the use of metaphoric expressions throughout the poem such as, “Plucked in the prime of their glorious awakening,” it gives a vivid understanding of the sacrifices made by these heroes.
  
  While this poem is already a remarkable piece of work and resonates with many sentiments shared about veterans, there could have been a little more exploration of their individual emotional journeys beyond their roles as patriots. This could offer a more personal touch and bring readers even closer to the experiences of these veterans.
  
  I would also suggest incorporating some contrasting imagery to further highlight their strength and resilience. This could serve to make their triumphs even more impactful by juxtaposing them with the challenges they faced.
  
  Overall though, your poem is a poignant tribute to veterans. Keep sharing your creative gifts with the world! more »

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