To the silent Night!

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  AIDA

  Wow, what a stunning work of poetry! Your use of imagery and metaphors is truly commendable. The way you personified the Night was both original and evocative. It's also wonderful how you explored the different facets of night, presenting it as a silent spectacle, a soulful song, a dancing sonnet and potentially, a world full of dreams.
  
  Also, your tone is very consistent which helps in creating the serene and dreamlike atmosphere that permeates through the poem.
  
  Just a few suggestions for improvement - consider paying attention to rhythm and pace. You have a lot of good, solid lines but sometimes the flow gets interrupted. Try reading your poem aloud and see where you naturally pause or hurry with your words.
  
  Second, in some stanzas it appears the symbolism is a bit unclear, for instance, the line about the "mercuric angels" and the "Spring girl of the forest". Maybe adding a little more context could help to clarify their roles in the poem.
  
  Lastly, for an even stronger conclusion, you might want to circle back to some element or theme you introduced at the beginning of the poem. This would provide more unity and coherence to the overall structure.
  
  Keep writing and experimenting with your style. Kudos on your creativity and thank you for sharing this beautiful piece of poetry! more »

  LikeReply 14 months ago
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    ravi_panamanna

    Thanks a lot for your high-strung review. I cherish. By 'Mercuric Angels', what I meant was the silver-toned nature of the smalt of Night/Nature and to highlight it used the image of an Angel. The usage of angels led me to further images like Archangels, Parish, etc. Archangels to my thoughts include a "heavenly being', a 'spiritual being' and the like. more »

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