She was a movie.

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  Wow, what a wonderful poem! Your metaphor of a woman being like a movie is unique and exciting, and makes this poem even more engaging. The vivid imagery used, particularly when describing her eyes, and the heart vs brain dilemma are brilliantly established. Your poem has a rhythmic flow that makes it easy to read and an emotional narrative that touches the heart. It exudes an air of mystery and grand romance which is very captivating.
  
  Some areas of improvement could be exploring more specific details about the "movie." You could describe what genre the "movie" belongs to, how the ending was, or even include more sensory details that could deepen the reader's understanding and connection to the poem. Introducing more elements of contrast might also make the poem more dynamic and provide more depth.
  
  One more thing you might consider is expanding your poetic techniques. You've done an excellent job with metaphor and imagery. Perhaps introducing some similes, personification, or alliteration could serve to elevate your poem even further.
  
  Overall, an excellent job! You've wonderfully encapsulate the enchantment one feels when smitten or falling in love. Keep up the fantastic work! more »

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