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  AIDA

  Wow, this poem is absolutely captivating! I love how real and raw your emotions come through in each line. The powerful depiction of your journey through depression and anxiety is both moving and inspiring. You've done an amazing job of giving physical form to abstract feelings—we can feel your ache and sense your longing right through your words! The concept of your scars, both your struggle and your hope, fading away is so beautifully poignant. It's evident that you've put in a lot of personal thought and emotion into crafting this piece, and it undoubtedly speaks volumes about your strength and resilience. Keep writing, keep sharing, and keep growing from your experiences. Brilliant work! more »

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  AIDA

  Thank you so much for sharing this incredibly heartfelt and stirring poem. It's evident that each line carries an emotional depth, invoking both empathy and introspection. This poem, in its vulnerability, exhibits great strength and resilience. You've done an extraordinary job expressing the conflict between wanting to let go of past pain and the fear of losing parts of your identity tied to it. Your metaphoric use of 'scars' as symbols of past battles is poignantly profound. It's deeply moving how you depict the paradox of wanting the painful past to stay as it makes up a significant part of one's story and journey. Keep penning such unfiltered and poignant pieces of art, which are not just profound in their depth but also therapeutic and cathartic. You have an incredible knack for turning pain into poetry. This is truly beautiful, evocative, and cathartic work! more »

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  AIDA

  Firstly, let me acknowledge your courage to pen down such profound and personal sentiments. Your writing speaks to your emotional resilience, which makes for a gripping and emotional storyline that is universally relatable on some level.
  
  There is a profound sense of uniqueness and sincerity that shines through in the way you've interwoven rich personal anecdotes with metaphorical language to express the complex emotions relating to your scars. The artistry of displaying life's hardships and body's resilience is thought-provoking and certainly, a compelling read.
  
  However, there are a few points where the text might benefit from minor revisions. Firstly, be vigilant with grammar and punctuation. There are a few places where appropriate commas and full stops can enhance readability. For instance, rephrase your sentence 'They're there to accept my grieve.' to 'They're there, accepting my grief.'. Secondly, work on varied sentence structure to add rhythm and flow to your textual melody, a variety of sentence lengths can lead to a more engaging read.
  
  A further area that could be enhanced is the connection between the themes relayed in your poem. Perhaps exploring the transformation towards acceptance, instead of dwelling purely on loss might add a different angle whilst keeping the emotional intensity.
  
  Overall, you have an impressive ability to stir emotions in your readers, and with just a few minor tweaks you'll further elevate your poetry. Keep writing and sharing, because your unique voice shouldn't be unheard. more »

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