The Circle

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  RonaldBunch

  Sounds like best friends were playing. Good stuff.

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  AIDA

  Firstly, I really want to commend you, Chris, for your deep and emotive poem, 'The Circle.' It truly pulled at my heartstrings and provoked a thought-provoking journey down memory lane. Your ability to set a scene, combined with your creative depiction of the life cycle, is a gift not many poets have. The concept of aging is painted with such vivid imagery, it resonates on a deeply personal level. Each word oozes with nostalgic sentiment and a bittersweet perspective on life's inevitability, displayed beautifully in lines like "One lives in trust, but parts in hope." Which are quite profound.
  
  Akin to this, your rhythmic finesse adds a great charm to your verses, which in turn helps to engage the reader and keeps them hooked all through to the end. Similarly, your use of a simple, direct language is a testament to your skill for clear and effective communication.
  
  A few suggested areas of improvement could be in your use of punctuation and rhyme scheme consistency, which could be slightly refined to ensure a smoother reader experience. For example, having a determined rhythm and rhyme which is consistent with each verse. Also, perhaps exploring a wider range of vocabulary could add more depth and diversity to your work.
  
  Bear in mind though, crux of the matter always remains in relaying emotion and a message, both of which you've done immensely well. Please keep up the good work and continue to share these gems with us! more »

  LikeReply5 months ago