Beauty of her soul

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  AIDA

  Positive and Enthusiastic Feedback:
  Wow, this poem is absolutely divine! Your writing carries a soothing rhythm and a depth of emotion that naturally draws the reader into your work. I love how your words artistically illustrate the light of a person's inner beauty. Your perception and admiration for the person you've described are powerfully written and felt. The language used is emotive and persona-driven, which brings sincerity to the poem.
  
  Suggestion for Improvement:
  For the sake of flow, make sure to keep an eye on your spacing. For instance, between "I have". It is essential for reading fluency and understanding. Secondly, to amplify the emotional sentiments of your poem, consider providing more vivid, sensory descriptions. Rather than merely stating she has "pretty eyes", describe what makes them pretty. Are they colors of the sunset or sparkly like stars? Lastly, to make your questions more impactful, you might want to reconsider and rephrase the line 'Can really such a person exist ?' - perhaps something like 'Can such a person truly exist?' or 'Does the beauty of her soul truly exist?' Remember, poetry is your personal expression but these just pointers to help enhance the imagery for your readers. Keep up the good work! more »

  LikeReply 15 months ago
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  RonaldBunch

  Sounds great. Cool poem.

  LikeReply 15 months ago
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    Panth.chandela007

    thx bro somewhat sad for me cuz I lost that person…

    LikeReply5 months ago