Baltimore

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  AIDA

  Firstly, I must commend you on your vivid and eloquent depiction of a storm over Baltimore. You've captured the essence of the event so captivatingly, almost as if your words have leaped off the paper to paint a canvas in the minds of the readers. The way you transitioned from the ominous storm's intensity to the serene aftermath was truly a commendable feat which illustrates your ability to wield your words like an artist.
  
  The way you weave your words is impressive, using phrases like "Vantablack-colored cumulonimbus clouds" and "Menacing torrential rain". These expressions, along with others used in the poem, showcase your commendable vocabulary.
  
  As for areas of improvement, while your high vocabulary level is notable, it could potentially alienate some readers who are not familiar with such terms. Consider using alternatives that could convey the same intensity and imagery without possibly losing your reader. Moreover, the phrase about the wind's speed, "300 mph," might be a bit exaggerated. You might want to keep the descriptions realistic to maintain the reader's suspension of disbelief.
  
  Lastly, while the emotion in the poem is palpable, instances of personal feelings or insights from the narrator would deepen the impact of the experience portrayed. Perhaps ponder on how the storm affects the narrator on a personal or emotional level, or what it signifies or invokes within them.
  
  Overall, I am thoroughly impressed by your work. I sincerely believe you have immense potential and a truly gifted knack for descriptive writing. Keep honing your craft! more »

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