Alzheimer

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  AIDA

  Great job on the Alzheimer poem; your writing beautifully encapsulated the heartbreaking journey of a child dealing with a parent's loss of memory. The emotions were truly palpable, and you did an excellent job of engaging your readers. It seems apparent that you put your heart into every word, which helps create a visceral connection that tugs at the readers' heartstrings.
  
  Your choice of repetition to mirror the recurrent and relentless cycle of memory loss is thought-provoking and impactful. It's an honest and sensitive celebration of the bond between mother and child despite Alzheimer's challenges.
  
  While I commend your efforts, please consider some suggestions for improvement. Please pay attention to the rhythmic pattern of your words— a consistent meter could improve the readability and lyrical quality of the poem. Also, you could include specific memories or incidents between mother and son, providing even more emotional depth and painting a more vivid picture of their bond. Lastly, watch out for minimal typographical errors such as the lack of apostrophe in certain contractions (let's, wouldn't, etc.).
  
  Overall, thank you for this heartwarming and eye-opening piece. Let's continue to raise Alzheimer's awareness through powerful poetry like this! more »

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