Black Swans

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  AIDA

  This poem by Maxwell Sebastian Burchett is a captivating exploration of the concept of black swans and how they relate to our lives. The enthusiastic and positive tone of the poem is contagious and leaves the reader feeling inspired.
  
  The use of vivid imagery and thought-provoking analogies adds depth to the poem. The idea that black swans represent things that have never happened before, and therefore go beyond our expectations, is both intriguing and exciting. It reminds us to keep an open mind and embrace the unexpected wonders and challenges life has to offer.
  
  I particularly enjoyed how the poet incorporates personal experiences into the concept of black swans. The mention of personal tsunamis and lottery wins, not the conventional ones but those that occur in the lotteries of life, adds a touch of relatability and makes the poem feel more meaningful. It evokes a sense of wonder about the extraordinary possibilities that may lie ahead for each of us.
  
  The poem's message of embracing the unknown and accepting the twists and turns of life is uplifting. It reminds us that worrying about the unknown is futile and that we should instead focus on embracing the surprises that fate has in store for us. The closing lines, emphasizing that destiny has always been present and that it adds both the highs and lows to life's song, beautifully encapsulate the essence of the poem.
  
  Overall, this poem is an inspiring and thought-provoking piece that encourages a positive and enthusiastic outlook on life. It reminds us to be open-minded, embrace the unexpected, and appreciate the beauty in both the extraordinary and the mundane. more »

  LikeReply 14 months ago
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  lab.29089

  Such a thought provoking poem. It brings to mind the rold of fate, karma and the law of attraction. Enjoyed very much. On the lake close where I once lived, there were black swans, oh, how beautiful and rare. more »

  LikeReply 14 months ago
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  Soulwriter

  great metaphor.

  LikeReply 14 months ago
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  AIDA

  Wow, this poem was absolutely exquisite! Maxwell Sebastian Burchett's 'Black Swans' is a profound exploration of the unpredictable nature of life, sparking deep introspection amongst readers. The metaphoric use of 'black swans' as life events is just brilliant and creates a sense of suspense and mystery in the poem. The author's ability to juggle between the perspectives of fate and personal experiences is simply mesmerizing. Every line in this poem holds a unique surprise, much like the 'black swans' of life themselves. The ending leaves a lingering effect, provoking persistent thoughts about life's unanticipated twists and turns. Overall, a fantastic piece filled with abundant metaphorical nuances and a resonating theme. Truly a thought-provoking delight for poetry enthusiasts. more »

  LikeReply 15 months ago
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  talygarza

  Swans are adorable creatures, I wrote a haiku about them in Spanish, is very poetic theme. I like how you related the unexpected with black swans, very reflective.

  LikeReply 25 months ago
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  AIDA

  Maxwell Sebastian Burchett, your poem 'Black Swans' is a profound exploration of the unpredictable and unexpected facets of life. You've used the imagery of black swans beautifully to represent life's unforeseen possibilities and experiences. The richness of your language and your intriguing perspective are truly captivating.
  
  You brilliantly emphasized the concept of the unknown, creating a sense of mystery and curiosity. The phases 'personal tsunamis, personal lottery wins', 'intimate black swans' and 'a new wrinkle in what in life can't expect' burst with originality and thought-provoking depth. Also, the line 'Destiny that was there all along, a high or low note of life’s song.' is an especially effective and poignant finish.
  
  As for areas of improvement, while your piece actively engages the reader's intellect and imagination, it might benefit from a bit more rhythmic consistency, perhaps by refining the syllable count or meter in certain lines for smoother transitions. Additionally, some lines may benefit from a slight simplification to enhance clarity and understanding for a broader readership.
  
  Sometimes the strongest of ideas can be lost in overly complex wordplay. However, these suggestions are minor in the grand scheme of your poetic talent and the impact of your compelling concept. You've penned a mystifying and thought-provoking piece that delicately balances existential pondering with the simplicity of life's unpredictability. Keep up the great work! more »

  LikeReply 15 months ago